Wikipedia:Peer review/Wesley Clark/archive1
- First and foremost, let me say I know the political section needs rewriting and sourcing. I'm working on that now. However, I would appreciate any advice on the lead or sizeable military career section, as it'd be nice to get the ball rolling. Staxringold talkcontribs 23:49, 8 January 2007 (UTC)
- Please see automated peer review suggestions here. Thanks, APR t 01:13, 9 January 2007 (UTC)
- Tweaked intro. Kaisershatner 14:21, 10 January 2007 (UTC)
- I included the valedictorian bit you added to the lead, but quite a bit of that made strange decisions (like a 2 sentence paragraph just to have another paragraph), hiding a link to awards and decorations in the phrase "distinguished career", and saying his service at NATO was after the US Army when it was a part of his US Army command. Staxringold talkcontribs 22:28, 10 January 2007 (UTC)