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I've listed this article for peer review because it's a Good Article that I've been working on over the past few days and I'm looking for suggestions for further improvements, with an eye to potentially taking it through FAC.
Thanks, Nikkimaria (talk) 08:01, 5 March 2014 (UTC)
Comments by Canada Hky (talk) 15:56, 9 March 2014 (UTC)
- The lead seems really short for an article as long as this. I am not sure if the solution is to expand the lead, or to remove some of the excessive detail in the really short sections of the article.
- The lead is repetitive: "Winnipeg's professional sports teams include..." and "Winnipeg's post-secondary institutions include...." "The economy includes..."
- One sentence paragraphs in the culture section and in a few other places. Very short paragraphs in general, not much flow when reading.
- The culture section is really extensively subdivided, and the subdivisions are really short. It makes the article quite choppy.
- In the references, some of the weblinked news articles have access dates, some don't. This should be consistent.
- Hey Canada Hky, I think I've resolved all of these except for the length of the lead - I'm not sure what else could be added to that, as it seems to touch on every section already. Nikkimaria (talk) 20:29, 29 March 2014 (UTC)