Wikipedia:Peer review/Your Love (Nicki Minaj song)/archive1

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I've listed this article for peer review because it was just listed as a GA and I would like to improve on it further, eventually being able to nominate it for FA status. Any help and suggestions would be very helpful to me! Thanks, (CA)Giacobbe (talk) 20:59, 17 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Comments

  • For a fair use image with the single cover, 1000 x 1000 or so is pretty big, are you sure that's okay?
  • "after it was stolen and leaked. After the song " vaguely repetitive "after ... after..."
  • "Described as a "rap ballad", " by whom?
  • "numbers 14 and four" comparable numbers should either be all text or all numbers.
  • "recording artist Annie Lennox (pictured)." actually, I think that's the Eurythmics pictured, so I guess you need to point the reader to Lennox who is on the right of the image.
  • "After being mixed differently and some lyrics rewritten" reads awkwardly to me. Suggest a copyedit.
  • "with Hot 93.7 radio" context, where is this radio station?
  • "also did a remix" never keen on "did" something.
  • Maybe "also did a remix to the " should be "also remixed the"?
  • Lil' Kim has a '.
  • "IThe song peaked " typo.
  • "Minaj was interviewed ..." -> "She was..."
  • "Onika Maraj Warren "Oak" Felder," comma missing.
  • Also worth explaining throughout that Nicki is Onika.
  • Ref 1, double period, double hyphen. Remove one period, turn double hyphen into en-dash.
  • Ref 9, avoid # for No.
  • Ref 19, no accessdate.
  • Ref 20, lots of info missing.
  • Check for spaced hyphens, replace with en-dash per WP:DASH.

The Rambling Man (talk) 17:38, 2 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]