Wikipedia:Peer review/Zombie (fictional)/archive1

This peer review discussion has been closed.
I've listed this article for peer review because I have been consolidating its information for the last several weeks. I feel that a great deal of good work has been done by previous editors, and the information is of good quality and well-sourced. It was, however, poorly organised; spread over three different articles with much overlap and little clarity as to jurisdiction. Now that it has been brought together, I was wondering if it might eventually be promoted to a higher class, possibly GA.

Thanks, Serendipodous 22:14, 2 March 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Comments

  • Lead's too short per WP:LEAD for an article of this length.
  • Avoid bold links in the lead per the MOS.
  • "Half Life" is a dab.
  • We shouldn't have inline external links like ""The Death of Halpin Frayser".
  • Our article just calls it the Epic of Gilgamesh, not The Epic of Gilgamesh.
  • "works couldn't be properly " avoid contractions.
  • Avoid overlinking, e.g. George A. Romero is linked twice in quick succession, as is his Night of the Living Dead...
  • Avoid linking common words like "disease".
  • Para starting "The 1954 publication ..." is entirely unreferenced.
  • Zombi II is (according to our article) actually Zombi 2.
  • "countries.)[23]" not sure that's where the full stop should go.
  • "RotLD " put this in parentheses after the expanded version if you're going to use (a non-standard!) abbreviation.
  • the Evil Dead series is actually The Evil Dead series.
  • Other paragraphs without reference, I would suggest for a GA that any sentence/para making a claim needs to be verifiable.
  • "the "zombie apocalypse", " no need for this text to be in bold.
  • "it wouldn't be " again, avoid contractions.
  • New York Times should be The New York Times.
  • War of the Worlds should be The War of the Worlds.
  • Similarly for the other literary titles.
  • In comics and In television sections are entirely unreferenced (apart from YuYu Hakusho which for some reason has three references).
  • "game - was an " should be an en-dash.
  • Fix the [when] tag".
  • In music section is borderline a list of trivia.
  • A zombie walk in Pittsburgh, Pennsylvania. no period required.
  • Avoid bare URLs in the refs.
  • "2011-10=02." should be a - not a =.
  • Online refs should have publisher, author, access date, publication date information where appropriate.
  • Don't mix date formats in the refs.
  • Check titles of refs for comlpliance with WP:DASH.
  • Be consistent with author names, either first last or last, first.

The Rambling Man (talk) 12:02, 8 March 2012 (UTC)[reply]