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May 21

Review of article

I have added an article named "Mothparja" and have improved it a lot. I have added sections, references, good content and photos. But except that it is still a stub-class article. So please review it , help me to correct it's grammatical or spelling mistakes. And if it is good enough to be graded up (higher than stub-class) . And if it is not able to do so then please tell me how can I improve it.FAAHS (talk) 09:49, 21 May 2022 (UTC)

This isn't really the best place to ask for article reviews. I guess that would be here. But a few really quick things I noticed:

• The tone is a little off. In places it reads like a story or narrative and it needs to sound more clinical and dispassionate. There are also areas where the tone gets too informal. A few examples:

• "Due to this the villagers left there and came to reside here."
• "So, some villagers of this village went on a journey to get knowledge and do something for this village."

• There are a few places where the English is not standard or up to WP requirements. A few examples:

• "2 hundred years old" => "two hundred years old" OR "200 years old" (and needs a reference)
• "From them their was also their leader named Moryal Sahito and his brothers." is both awkward and unclear. If Sahito was the first leader, maybe just say "Moryal Sahito was the first leader" and then provide some additional information. It also needs a reference.

• I didn't review the references cited, but one thing that struck me was that many of them are used to support the number of schools. That's fine; those statements needed to be referenced, but they're not controversial statements; one or two would probably be enough. Meanwhile there are many other interesting or questionable statements with no references at all. Some of the material sounds like lore taken from village elders. That stuff is fascinating, but it can't be used in Wikipedia due to our rules about WP:OR and WP:RS.

Getting an article up to standard is a lot of work. You've got a good start, but there's some way still to go. Keep at it! 70.24.163.91 (talk) 13:24, 21 May 2022 (UTC)

"We are the first" (Fermi Paradox) (May 13)

Discussed at [1]. 2A02:C7C:365E:E700:497A:B97C:8087:CCF8 (talk) 12:23, 21 May 2022 (UTC)

Do you have a question? Shantavira|^{feed me} 18:50, 21 May 2022 (UTC)

It's probably intended as a response to the section of the same title in [2], which has since been archived. Whether it's worth adding to the archive is debatable. --←Baseball Bugs ^{What's up, Doc?} carrots→ 22:22, 21 May 2022 (UTC)