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Shalabh Maheshwari —Preceding unsigned comment added by 122.161.195.95 (talk) 08:39, 10 June 2010 (UTC)[reply]

I'm sorry, do you mean that you are requesting that an article on Shalabh Maheshwari be created or have you created that article? I don't understand what you mean. Chevy monte carlo 19:05, 10 June 2010 (UTC)[reply]

History of military nutrition

Looking for feedback on History of military nutrition article. Have added citations, links, etc., and really appreciate any recommendations for improvement (additions, deletions, clarifications, etc.) Thanks! MrZbignew (talk) 15:50, 10 June 2010 (UTC)[reply]

An excellent article. I have made a few minor improvements (There was an edit summary that had been placed in the article by accident, and I added bullet points to the list of links in the 'External links' section. You've got a lot of information in the article, which is great, but there are plenty of references for them which is fine. To be honest I can't find anything that you should perhaps try and improve! Maybe if you want to help out with Wikipedia a bit more you might like to take a look here for some suggestions on what to do. Of course you may help out with the requests here if you want! Chevy monte carlo 19:10, 10 June 2010 (UTC)[reply]

The Global Task Force on Expanded Access to Cancer Care and Control in Developing Countries

Requesting feedback for the article The Global Task Force on Expanded Access to Cancer Care and Control in Developing Countries. This article is to explain the purpose the Global Task Force on Expanded Access to Cancer Care and Control in Developing Countries and the work that it does. here is my article. Amandahgei (talk) 15:56, 10 June 2010 (UTC)[reply]

I made a minor correction to the opening paragraph. I think that you should maybe try and add more web references to the article if you can, to supplement the references you already have. Chevy monte carlo 19:12, 10 June 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Long Branch Variety Show

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Dausten59/Long_Branch_Variety_Show Working an article about the Long Branch Saloon in Dodge City, feedback please. Dausten59 (talk) 16:33, 10 June 2010 (UTC)Doug Austen, 6-10-10[reply]

Ah, I see you have a problem with the links in your article. To add a link to another Wikipedia article, you need to add [[ ]] around the article name that you want to link. I see you have only put one [ ] around the links, and that is why they're not showing up. I hope you understand what I mean :) Chevy monte carlo 20:06, 10 June 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks! Got it fixed! Dausten59 (talk) 21:00, 10 June 2010 (UTC)Doug Austen 6-10-10[reply]

OK, is that alright or do you want me to look at the article more closely for any problems? Chevy monte carlo 05:12, 11 June 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Any suggestions would be great. THANKS! Dausten59 (talk) 13:47, 11 June 2010 (UTC)Doug Austen, 6-11-10[reply]

I think you should maybe try and add sections to the article. You can do this by placing == == around the section name, for example ==History== creates a section with 'history' as the title. Chevy monte carlo 14:44, 11 June 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Words in Color

Hoping someone can review my article, and let me know if I can clean something up. I know a lot about this educational approach, but am afraid to write more and risk sounding like an advertisement. How am I doing so far? Thank you! —Preceding unsigned comment added by ESWI (talk • contribs) 17:11, 10 June 2010 (UTC)[reply]

I think you should try adding more references to the article, as at the moment it relies on just a couple of sources. I also think that you should maybe add more categories to the article. You can search for appropriate categories by going here. Hope this helps :) Chevy monte carlo 20:15, 10 June 2010 (UTC)[reply]