Wikipedia:Requests for feedback/2011 February 10

Kay Mills, writer

Seeking feedback as I try to make this public.Thanks!

Tryout22 (talk) 04:31, 10 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Kay_Mills,_writer

Seeking feedback as I seek to make this public. Thanks!

Tryout22 (talk) 04:32, 10 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Kay Mills (writer)

It's already live
Several claims lack a reliable source - including the Christopher award, info about the first book, and the final paragraph. All facts need a reference to a reliable source, or they may be removed by any editor.
"revived the nearly-lost stories of women journalists and civil rights icons" is not neutral, and unreferenced
Please don't put links to external websites, such as http://www.latimes.com/ within the body of the article. Only wikilinks.

Chzz ► 20:40, 14 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]

The Love Game

Request feedback as I try to make this page public. Thanks!

The Thinking Man's Kate (talk) 05:17, 10 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Sy Kattelson This is an article about a 20th century American photographer associated with the Photo League

I would appreciate any help reviewing the format,readability and references of this article. Thank you.

Rbutscher (talk) 05:29, 10 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Buro Buro Springs Vermi Farm

Please provide feedback on content and references as I would like to make this article public. Thanks

Pthenares (talk) 08:29, 10 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]

I'm sorry, I cannot find an article with that name. Chzz ► 20:36, 14 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Everything that i have written about this writer is true and it has been inspired from a book that i have mentioned in sources.his life time achievements have been included in that book.he won the natinal award as an illustrator,rammohan roy award(1st position as the writer of the story collage) and is also the writer at little magazine

Missleader (talk) 12:43, 10 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]

You need to discuss this in the deletion discussion, Wikipedia:Articles for deletion/Siddhartha Bose. Chzz ► 20:29, 14 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Software_epigene

Tasos epibuzzz (talk) 12:49, 10 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]

The article has been deleted as an advert, and the user blocked for adding promotional material. Chzz ► 20:16, 14 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Protoje

My first article. Is it ok?

The888th (talk) 14:38, 10 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]

[[1]] Please can this be moved to a real page?

 Requesting that this article be moved to a real wiki page.

FauxClaud (talk) 18:15, 10 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Okay, it's now at Hand coolers, if I did it right.--Physics is all gnomes (talk) 17:53, 11 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]

User:Translog/Translogistics

I would like to submit an article about the transportation company that I work for to Wikipedia. I have placed my proposed article in my user space and I would appreciate feedback on the article.

Thanks

Translog (talk) 19:16, 10 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]

An Te Liu

Although this article has been reviewed, the text box calling it a "new unreviewed article" remains. Would appreciate feedback here. How do we move on to having the article accepted?

Thanks for your help with this!

Filtrate (talk) 19:36, 10 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]

It still needs work.

You have many embedded links. They should be changed to proper references.
You had a nonstandard external links listing style, I changed it
I changed San Francisco Museum of Modern Art from an external link to a wikilink. If you have a specific link to the exhibit, rather than just the general museum link, it could be added as a reference.
The link at Art Institute of Chicago was a bad link, so I changed it to a wikilink. (see above comment)
The external Link to the Art Institute was broken. I fixed it. However, it links to a 2008 exhibit. Why?
The link attached to "An Te Liu: Matter" was a bad link. I found what I think is the proper link and converted it into a reference. See if it is what you want.
if you can convert the remaining embedded links to proper refs, I'll remove the unreviewed template. If you don't know how to do this, let me know and I'll help you.--SPhilbrick T 23:35, 10 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Filtrate Thank you for your very helpful comments. I changed the embedded links to references, and also added some new information. Please let me know if these changes are sufficient.

I removed the unreviewed template. Nice work.--SPhilbrick T 17:37, 12 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]

[[2]]

I would greatly appreciate feedback about how to make this article neutral in tone. Thank you.

Filtrate (talk) 19:49, 10 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Micah_Lexier

I would appreciate feedback on how to make this article neutral in tone. Thank you.

Filtrate (talk) 19:50, 10 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Arkham_Horror:_Game_Play/Fan_Fiction

Original stories based on the works of H.P. Lovecraft and the Arkham Horror board game

MyArkhamHorror (talk) 22:15, 10 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]

The article has already been deleted, following a short discussion. Wikipedia is not for any original works. See WP:NOT. Chzz ► 20:22, 14 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]

://en.wikipedia.org/w/index.php?title=User:BeGreen77&oldid=412577766

BeGreen77 (talk) 22:51, 10 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]

The user-page was deleted as an advert. See WP:BFAQ. Chzz ► 20:24, 14 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Merrionette park fire department

Volcom7205 (talk) 22:53, 10 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]

This needs several independent reliable sources - e.g. newspapers or books. See WP:VRS. Chzz ► 20:25, 14 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]

User:Crownworldpr/Jacob Latimore

Crownworldpr (talk) 00:54, 11 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Great start to an article. The young man seems to be on his way up the ladder of fame. Unfortunately, I don't think it qualifies under our WP:GNG, WP:BIO, or even WP:MUSIC. Out of the three references provided, two of them are only trivial mentions. There is only one significant third party source which doesnt meet most of our inclusion criteria. It meets WP:MUSIC #10, but that criteria says that if it is the only criteria met, the information may be better included in an article about the album. The other thing I might suggest is using {{infobox musician}} and also on your external links, format them like this [http://www.urlgoeshere.com/moreurlstuff TITLE GOES HERE]. Also, try to use the {{cite web}} template for your citations. Good start, needs improvement before moving into article space.--v/r - T P 01:08, 11 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]