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Helicopter

This article is often contested as to what material should be included and what format it should take and has begun to stagnate. I have my own ideas, but sometimes we all need that outside input that isn't invested in the article to put us over the top. --Born2flie 02:48, 8 October 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Trevor MacInnis

To start off, the intro is great. The rest that could use a little work, not much though.

The history section is almost written like a list. Almost each paragraph starts with "In 19XX..." (in fact two paragraphs in a row start "In 1906..."). More variety is required.

Done for the most part. A few of the early portions need some copy editing, but most of the rest of the section has returned to a prose style with variety. --Born2flie (talk) 23:23, 29 December 2007 (UTC)[reply]

The Uses section needs an intro before jumping right into subsections.

I think this section actually has too many subsections. I'd like to convert it to text paragraphs, but not sure how to reference all the articles related to those uses. Any ideas? --Born2flie 06:42, 23 October 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Done. Subsections removed and sections blended into a more prose discussion of the uses. --Born2flie (talk) 23:23, 29 December 2007 (UTC)[reply]

The Hazards section needs more info, not just links in a list.

I've actually argued against continued inclusion of this section. Do you think the article could do without it~~, then~~? --Born2flie 06:42, 23 October 2007 (UTC)[reply]
- I'm going to recommend, once again, removal of this section, on the Talk page. It is not present on any other general aircraft type article. The airplane article does not discuss hazards of air travel, nor do I think it should in a general discussion about an aircraft type. None of the print encyclopedias do this. --Born2flie (talk) 23:23, 29 December 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Just a few things to start with. - Trevor MacInnis (Contribs) 02:19, 21 October 2007 (UTC)[reply]