Wikipedia:WikiProject Biography/Peer review/Hermann-Paul

I would like this entry to be evaluated with the hope of becoming a Good Article.

Jdfulmer 03:35, 16 November 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Review by DrKiernan

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  • Please add more links to the article, especially to the lead, e.g. First World War, Druet, move up ripolin link, and to sections lacking wikilinks.
  • Who or what is R.E.D.?
  • Please add {{persondata|PLEASE SEE [[WP:PDATA]]!}} along with the required parameters to the article - see Wikipedia:Persondata for more information.[?]
  • Can you improve upon the references given? skygaze.com is just a self-published web-site. See WP:RS for an explanation of reliable sources.
  • The entire "Post-war" and "Rediscovered" sections need referencing.
  • Do you mean "raised by" or "raised against"?
  • You use both "1920's" and "1980s", please standardise apostrophe use.
  • The article is very pro-Paul. What about the counter-criticism?

Thanks, DrKiernan 09:17, 16 November 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Comments by JDFulmer

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  • Links were added in the lead.
  • R.E.D. is the author who covered Paris for the Burlington Magazine for Connoisseurs. He published under his initials. In order to avoid confusion, I've change the cite to the magazine's name.
  • Persondata was added at the top of the article.
  • I'll improve the references. Unfortuantely, the wikipedia entry on the Dreyfus affair was lacking at the time of the citation. Some of the omitted references were based on the body of Hermann-Paul's work. In those cases, I could cite an online catalog of his work.
  • Personally, I would never write "1920's" but wikipedia is a collaborative effort. I've changed the style to 1920s, etc., as a decade holds few possessions.
  • Your point on counter-criticism is apt. The man liked to ruffle feathers and as a result, he had more than his share of critics. Several of whom had legitimate reasons to pan him. I will make a point to include it. —Preceding unsigned comment added by Jdfulmer (talkcontribs) 17:51, 19 November 2007 (UTC)[reply]