Wikipedia:WikiProject Film/Peer review/Bound (film)

Bound (film)

I would like to nominate this article for GA soon, so would very much appreciate any input as to what still needs to be done. In particular, I am worried about the "themes" section, not wanting it to look like original research (it's not - it all came from the DVD commentary and an interview). Any comments gratefully received. Thanks, --Beloved freak 18:54, 12 July 2007 (UTC)[reply]

From a brief look, the lead could possibly be expanded. I might have a more in-depth look later --Lenin and McCarthy | (Complain here) 21:40, 17 July 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks, I've expanded it a bit. It's 3 paragraphs as per WP:LEAD. Anything else? --Beloved freak 12:54, 26 July 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Lenin & McCarthy

You might not need to put so much emphasis in the lead section on the Wachowski Brothers doing The Matrix. It just doesn't seem too relevant IMPO.
- Ok, I took that out. Beloved freak 11:22, 29 July 2007 (UTC)[reply]
The second half of the plot summary seems unclear at some points. The explanation of the plot in paragraph 5 could possibly be simplified. Aside from that, mostly just small things would be needed (i.e. why does Micky come? what specifically does Violet implicate Caesar in? Is there anything you can do about the two consecutive sentences starting with "she"?)
- Sorted, I think... I merged those two sentences starting with "she" so it's just one long sentence. Not sure if it's too long though. Beloved freak 11:22, 29 July 2007 (UTC)[reply]
In "Conception" I saw two consecutive sentences starting with "they". The introduction of Dino also seems somewhat abrupt. Consider adding what part he played in the film's production in the sentence he is first mentioned.
- There are 3 consecutive sentences actually. Not sure yet how to sort that.Beloved freak 11:22, 29 July 2007 (UTC)[reply]
I've noticed a trend towards incorporating "Casting" sections with film cast lists. I don't know if you think that would work for this one but you might consider it. Also, consider moving the pic of Caesar to "filming" to illustrate the text on the character's portrayal.
- I plan to expand the cast section, I'd forgotten that actually. I moved the picture. I may use a different one though, I think that one may be stretching Fair Use a bit. Beloved freak 11:22, 29 July 2007 (UTC)[reply]

I saw some other odd wording that I'll try to tweak myself. --Lenin and McCarthy | (Complain here) 17:43, 28 July 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for that, it looks better, and thanks for the suggestions.--Beloved freak 11:22, 29 July 2007 (UTC)[reply]

One more: when did the first DOP resign exactly? --Lenin and McCarthy | (Complain here) 17:46, 28 July 2007 (UTC)[reply]

I don't know. I got that from this interview and it doesn't say when exactly. Beloved freak 11:22, 29 July 2007 (UTC)[reply]