Wikipedia:WikiProject India/Peer review/2007

Economy of ancient Tamil country

The Sangam age is considered an important period in the history of South India. This article aims to give the reader a detailed account of the state of the economy in the Tamil country during this age. Please review and provide feedback, as to how to make this article FA quality. Thanks. Lotlil 02:27, 26 July 2007 (UTC)

On first look the article seems to well written with sufficient citations. If possible, please reduce the size of introduction. Nice job... Praveen 20:02, 31 July 2007 (UTC)

Thanks, I will try to do that. Lotlil 22:56, 31 July 2007 (UTC)

Jagadish Chandra Bose

I've listed this article for peer review under multiple wikiprojects because I'd like to get some creative feedback to take this article to GA status. Thanks,

Arman ^(Talk) 05:01, 4 October 2007 (UTC)

Automated review

The following suggestions were generated by a semi-automatic javascript program, which some editors find useful and others do not. Be aware that not all automatically generated comments may be applicable.

• Please expand the lead to conform with guidelines at Wikipedia:Lead. The article should have an appropriate number of paragraphs as is shown on WP:LEAD, and should adequately summarize the article.^[?] Done
• Per Wikipedia:Context and Wikipedia:Manual of Style (dates), months and days of the week generally should not be linked. Years, decades, and centuries can be linked if they provide context for the article.^[?] Done
• Per Wikipedia:Manual of Style (numbers), there should be a non-breaking space -   between a number and the unit of measurement. For example, instead of 12 Meter, use 12 Meter, which when you are editing the page, should look like: 12 Meter.^[?] Done
• Per Wikipedia:Context and Wikipedia:Build the web, years with full dates should be linked; for example, link January 15, 2006.^[?] Done
• There are a few occurrences of weasel words in this article- please observe WP:AWT. Certain phrases should specify exactly who supports, considers, believes, etc., such a view.
  • apparently
  • might be weasel words, and should be provided with proper citations (if they already do, or are not weasel terms, please strike this comment).^[?]  Done
• Please make the spelling of English words consistent with either American or British spelling, depending upon the subject of the article. Examples include: meter (A) (British: metre), metre (B) (American: meter), realise (B) (American: realize), isation (B) (American: ization), signalling (B) (American: signaling), program (A) (British: programme), skeptic (A) (British: sceptic). Done
• Watch for redundancies that make the article too wordy instead of being crisp and concise. (You may wish to try Tony1's redundancy exercises.)
  • Vague terms of size often are unnecessary and redundant - “some”, “a variety/number/majority of”, “several”, “a few”, “many”, “any”, and “all”. For example, “All pigs are pink, so we thought of a number of ways to turn them green.” Done
• Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that it exemplifies some of Wikipedia's best work. See also User:Tony1/How to satisfy Criterion 1a.^[?]

You may wish to browse through User:AndyZ/Suggestions for further ideas. Thanks, DrKiernan 08:44, 4 October 2007 (UTC)

The suggestions from the automated review have been incorporated in the article now. Arman ^(Talk) 10:32, 5 October 2007 (UTC)

Kayastha

This article and the editors could use suggestions on how to improve it.

• Please see automated peer review suggestions here. Thanks, APR _t 22:09, 8 May 2007 (UTC)

• I'm unable to make sense of the article. I see the Kayastha trace from Chitraguptaji, but I'm unable to see how that fits in with the subcastes section or how that section's image fits with the text given there and how either relate to the subject. Context is needed for all unfamiliar terms. Then the NOTES: section gives three seemingly different definitions of the term with no reconcilation to what's in the rest of the article. Basically we're given almost no information on how the different information about the subject relates to the whole and to the rest of the information. For example how do the "sons of" sections fit in and why are they important? 2) The VEDIC ORIGIN note completely violates WP:NPOV and appears to be WP:NOR to boot. Work on organizing the whole article logically so it is clear how the parts relate, what are the important point, and provide context to ease the reader in. Also tell us how the information is known, from what sources, and if any are considered more reliable than others. - Taxman ^Talk 22:16, 8 May 2007 (UTC)

Birla Institute of Technology and Science

BITS, Pilani is considered as one of the premier technology Universities in India. There is a need to improve, add images and also peer -review this article. I have restructured the article. Some parts need to be expanded.

Vinwe 14:53, 18 April 2007 (UTC)

Review by — Ambuj Saxena (talk)

A good start, but still a long way to go. Here are the things to be worked on:

1. Expand lead. include information on what thing BITS is famous for.
2. A locator map should include all locations; not just the ones in India.
3. The "Reputation and ranking" section can be converted to prose format. Also, try to include unfavourable rankings also.
4. Create sections with same overall theme, rather than institute-based. That is, make a section on campus and include details of all the campus in paragraph format. Another section can be on "Academics" in which first point out what is common to all, and then state salient points of individual campuses in paragraph format.
5. There should be single section on "Alumni" which should deal with both the chapters as well as notable alumni. State what the alumni have achieved; don't just state their names.
6. Similar to what has been explained above, create a section on Student life and culture, and club all the fests, events under it. All fests need not have a separate section.
7. Improve on references. Some sections completely lack them.

Get back to me if you need help. Regards, — Ambuj Saxena (talk) 12:25, 13 June 2007 (UTC)

Presidency College, Kolkata

Adding peer review request by User:Gamesmasterg9. -- Ganeshk (talk) 14:46, 23 March 2007 (UTC)

• Comments

1. The lead section is very short.
2. The section on 'Recent history' can be widened to a large extent, also no mention of the controversy regarding UGC grants to the college and enhanced academic status.
3. Also the 'Departments' section links to the subjects in general and not college specific info.
4. 'Presy culture' is intimately linked with the hostels, yet only one line is devoted to the topic, this needs to be looked into.
5. Reference section should be introduced for verifiability of info.

You can take cue from other Featured Articles of the same type like Michigan State University, University of Michigan, Indian Institute of Technology, Kharagpur etc.

LegalEagle 14:58, 9 April 2007 (UTC)

Karamana

This is a formal request for peer review for the article- Karamana Because, Karamana is considered to be one of the important places in the district of thiruvananthapuram. It has the cultural, economical and social quotient of both kerala and tamilnadu. Santhosh Janardhanan 11:08, 14 March 2007 (UTC)

• Comments Lacks references and inline citations. Add those. Please see the article Shahbag, which is a neighbourhood of Dhaka, and has recently undergone great improvement. You may consider following the format there, eg Etymology, History, Layout, Culture etc. Or you may see Wikipedia:WikiProject Indian cities for guidance. Regards.--Dwaipayan (talk) 08:49, 22 March 2007 (UTC)

• Comments :

1. The land of Karamana is made fertile by its own river, Karamana River - Is this sentence accurate ? Can Karamana river be considered as the own river of Karamana region ? I believe that the sentence should be reframed.
2. The section Antiquity data contains just one sentence. The sentence can be moved to the lead, and the section can be dropped.
3. In the section Civil Society and Administration, the sentence : passes through Karamana onward to the CBD's of Thiruvananthapuram. creates confusion to readers. Please expand CBD.
4. The hyperlinks given in the article should be changed to wikipedia Citations.
5. There are many sentences which starts immediatly after a punctuation mark, without any space in between. A thorough copy editing is needed for the article. See : Wikipedia:How to copy-edit

Thats all for now. I will pitch in with more review comments, once these issues are addressed. Cheers, -- Rajith Mohan ^{(Talk to me..)} 11:04, 29 March 2007 (UTC)

• Response :

I've taken care of Rajith's points. I invite Rajith once more to review this article.

thanks

Santhosh Janardhanan 13:14, 7 September 2007 (UTC)

P. V. Narasimha Rao

Hello. Narasimha Rao's contribution to India's development is probably amongst the most understated of all Indian PM's. Kindly share your views on what should be done to improve this article.--Shahab 10:19, 28 February 2007 (UTC)

Some thoughts -
1. I think Babri Masjid needs mention in the lead article
2.The lead article fails to mention PV's life before his PM post. he held various posts incl. External Affairs Min, AP CM etc
3. Rao's later life was marked by an political isolation due to his association with many corruption charges. He remains to date the only Indian Prime Minister to have been convicted in a corruption case, although a higher court later overturned that decision. All other charges against him also turned out to be false, and before his death in 2004, Rao had the satisfaction of being acquitted in every single one of them. - POV material. please re-word
4. Rao retired in 1991 from politics and came back after Rajiv Gandhi's assasination. the same needs to be mentioned with reference
5. Rao's cabinet included Sharad Pawar, himself a strong contender for the PM's job, as defence minister. - The sentence can be removed as it is not relevant
6. i think ayodha needs more attention and make latur as a seperate para. the spill over of ayodhya into mumbai blasts is not covered adequately
7. Another political accomplishment of Rao was to keep the highly influential and ambitious Sonia Gandhi out of Congress during his reign - POV material. How did he keep her out? 'ambitious' and 'influential' makes the statement double-POV
Kalyan 19:43, 18 May 2007 (UTC)

Mani Madhava Chakyar

Hi, I want to improve this article about one of the greatest Indian Dancer and world renowned Koodiyattam maestro late Guru Padma Shree Mani Madhava Chakyar.Its been failed to be a GA i want to improve it, so i request you all to comment and suggest about how to make it a good article.Sreekanthv 09:39, 15 May 2007 (UTC)

• I saw 3 unlinked names.If there are no pages of those people,then let it be. It is not a hard and fast rule that a name should lead to a page.

• I saw many many things in bold letters. I don't know whether it is against Wikipedia rules, but they are to be highly preveted. Try to remove them. Articles relating to biographies of people actually don;t have it. I work on Music articles, so see Gwen Stefani, its a Featured Article. It has no such Bold things. User:Luxurious.gaurav

Silent Valley National Park

This article has been selected as the Collaboration of the Month (March 2007) by WikiProject Protected areas of India.

We are working to upgrade the Silent Valley article to at least B-Class India articles of High-importance [1] status.

Detailed suggestions for improvement from disinterested third party Wikipedians will be taken seriously and acted upon this month.
We have done a lot but may be getting Myopic.

Specific comments on each section may also be added to to our Tasks. Links to newer references would also be most appreciated.

Thank You,-Marcus 20:35, 7 March 2007 (UTC)

The History section should be written in a prose manner rather than a chronological way. The visitor information part need to be summarised and need to be written in a manner which is suitable for an encyclopedia. The present content may be incorporated into WikiTravel. Pls follow wikipedia ciation rules. U can get some templates here WP:CITET. This is first overall impression. Amartyabag ^TALK2ME 10:21, 22 March 2007 (UTC)

Scheduled Caste and Scheduled Tribe (Prevention of Atrocites) Act., 1989

I think in the times when the present government is trying to bring in reservations what is being dusted under the carpet is the whole issue of how SC/STs are treated in our country. Though an Act exists to help uplift their position, it remains to be seen if the Act is in fact effective? The present tries to analyze that and shows how inconsistentcies exist in the Act and what can be done to over come them.Prashant Roy 06:50, 6 November 2006 (UTC)

spelling- (Prevention of Atrocities) and not '(Prevetion of Attrocites)' in the name... --hydkat 14:43, 17 November 2006 (UTC)

• Comments. A good start, but a lot needs to be done. First of all, the lead is not a proper summary of the article. See WP:LEAD for details. Also, the article basically starts after the act was implemented. What about the history of the act? Details on the historical cases that led to the enforcement of the act? Were there any political activities involved? Which parties supported/opposed it? These details can be included to make the article more coherent. Another issue is the article is its tone. After reading the article, it seems that the article is written in a tone of hopelessness. Avoid using phrases such as "glaring example", "situation has not improved much", etc. Also, the section on Suggestions is full of Original research. It should be toned down, and the section should deal with well-cited facts. Implementing these suggestions should make the article a decent B-class article. Hope this helps. — Ambuj Saxena (☎) 09:32, 27 February 2007 (UTC)