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A very new article that's currently a GA nominee, but I intend to take this one through MilHist A-class review and possibly FAC in the future. I don't think there are any citation or MOS issues in it, so I'm looking for a general prose/grammar/punctuation check through. I tend to overuse commas, for example :) Carre16:56, 2 November 2007 (UTC)[reply]
May one ask who said that you use too many commas? A quick read showed some missing :) There are issues with WP:BUNCH that need to be fixed; also, one of the photos on the left side covers a line of text above (in Firefox 2+ browser). The BUNCH link will help you fix those. Regards, Unimaginative Username (talk) 06:27, 22 November 2007 (UTC)[reply]
The commas have been vanishing during Malachirality's copyedit - I think some parenthetical ones might need to go back in though. The image one is odd - that was commented on in the FAC, but it's not a problem for me here (also Firefox 2.0.0.9): since I can't actually see the problem, I don't think I can fix it myself; might I ask what screen resolution you're using? That way I may be able to reproduce and thus fix. Carre (talk) 18:10, 23 November 2007 (UTC)[reply]
