Wikipedia:WikiProject Military history/Assessment/Derfflinger class battlecruiser
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I thought I'd give you guys a break from my World War I German battleships...with an article about a class of World War I German battlecruisers. In all seriousness, this article has been significantly improved, and passed GA about a week ago. I appreciate any and all comments and suggestions as I prepare this article for an eventual FAC. Thanks in advance to all reviewers. Parsecboy (talk) 00:49, 13 August 2009 (UTC)[reply]
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- No issues reported with dismabig or external links. A few images may be in need of alt text though, please check and make sure this is added to the article.
- In the design section you have the following paragraph: "This was due to the fact that the latest British battleships had thicker main belt armor, up to 300 mm." I can't think in metric, so can you add the standard measurement for 300 mm.
- What's the difference between a diesel engine and a diesel generator? Earlier in the article I read that the diesel engines were not ready for service at the time the battlecruisers were in service, now I read that each had a diesel generator installed. It may be useful to note the difference in the long run so as to avoid confusion in the article.
- Again, when you get the chance, try to add the gold mark inflation value to the article. I won;t hold this one against you, just a comment.
- In the section "SMS Derfflinger" you mention that the battlecruiser had damage to her turbines but you do not give a reason why int eh article, can this be added?
- In the section "SMS Lützow" you note that her turbine was also damaged, do you know why? I would add this to the article as well.
- Otherwise everything looks good. Well done! TomStar81 (Talk) 02:49, 13 August 2009 (UTC)[reply]
- Thanks for looking the article over, Tom. I added a conversion for the 300mm in the design section. The difference between diesel engines and generators is that the engines turn the screws, while the generators only provide electric power. I added "electric" for both types of generators; is this more clear now? As to the turbine damage on Derfflinger and Lützow, Staff's book doesn't go into much detail. I'd assume that they were just accidents/equipment malfunctions, but I can't say one way or the other. I did clarify that both instances occurred during shakedown cruises. Parsecboy (talk) 14:17, 13 August 2009 (UTC)[reply]
- Support Everything appears to be in order and addressed. Well Done!— Preceding unsigned comment added by TomStar81 (talk • contribs) 03:27, 14 August 2009 (UTC)[reply]
- Support Minor copyedit, mainly for style, but in general yet more fine work. Cheers, Ian Rose (talk) 15:20, 15 August 2009 (UTC)[reply]
- Support. Can you hide the disambiguator on SMS Moltke (1910) please? Otherwise looks great. – Joe N 21:09, 16 August 2009 (UTC)[reply]
- Thanks, Joe. I fixed the template (one too many pipes) so the dab is now hidden. Parsecboy (talk) 22:01, 16 August 2009 (UTC)[reply]
- Support Conversions are needed for the tonnage figures for the coal bunkerage, might I suggest using convert|xxx|t|ton which will give you metric tons, long and short tons? They're also needed for the gun ranges and the muzzle velocity. Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 19:18, 18 August 2009 (UTC)[reply]
- Thanks for reviewing the article, Sturmvogel. I added conversions where necessary (though I used the {{convert|xxx|MT}} format, which gives the same results as the version you suggested). Parsecboy (talk) 19:40, 18 August 2009 (UTC)[reply]
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