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Fred Moosally

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Passed --Eurocopter (talk) 14:49, 18 January 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Respectfully submit this BLP article for A-class consideration. The subject was a central and controversial figure in the USS Iowa turret explosion and was later played by James Caan in a movie about the incident. Self-nomination. Cla68 (talk) 14:25, 8 January 2009 (UTC)[reply]

JonCatalan—Support
  1. The article, I think, suffers from overlinking. This issue has been brought up during FACs more frequently, so I feel it'll be safer to fix the issue now. This includes links to such words such as circa. In other words, links that are generally not very relevant to the article, or are general words that people don't need to open a link to. It distracts from the article. Other examples include football and finance. Country names are generally not wikilinked any longer, either (such as Vietnam). I've found this out myself fairly recently, when I found people delinking nation names.
  2. I'm not sure, but I believe that through MoS $1 million should actually be one million dollars, just because of the single digit number. I know that this is true for 1 million vs. one million in general.
  3. I'm not sure on this one, but numbers that begin sentences should be spelled out. The issue is related; the number comes right after the semi-colon. (This is referring to the sentence: A week after taking command, Moosally and his executive officer, Mike Fahey, canceled a planned $1 million repair package for Iowa's main gun batteries, including repairs to the main gun turrets' lighting, electrical, powder hoists, and hydraulic systems; 75 detailed deficiencies in all.)

JonCatalán(Talk) 06:34, 10 January 2009 (UTC)[reply]

  1. I removed some links [1]. The "Vietnam" link actually links to the Vietnam conflict, not the country, so I left it.
  2. I think you're right about the number and that's a good catch. I corrected it [2]. Cla68 (talk) 01:10, 12 January 2009 (UTC)[reply]
  3. I think you're right about that one also. I corrected it [3]. Cla68 (talk) 01:10, 12 January 2009 (UTC)[reply]
  • I don't know what to do about that birthdate. None of the sources has it and the US Internet birthdate database doesn't have a listing for him. Thank you for the helpful edits to the article. Cla68 (talk) 14:14, 12 January 2009 (UTC)[reply]
  • Weak Support - I'm of the mind that BLPs from the 20th century should have their date of birth, but like you I could not find any references except for what you have already provided in that regard. Otherwise, this article follows the criteria put forth for A-class articles. -MBK004 18:17, 17 January 2009 (UTC)[reply]
  • Support - Good prose, detail, sourcing. Couple of points:
    • Iowa, with Moosally at the helm, narrowly missed colliding with the frigates USS Moinster and Farragut and the cruiser South Carolina before running aground in soft mud... Was there no investigation or comeback for this incident?
    • If you're interested (not certain if required by MOS) you know you can make the retrieval dates in cite web consistent with your other dates by using "accessyear = 2008 | accessdaymonth = December 19," rather than "accessdate" which gives the less pleasing "2008-12-19".
  • Cheers, Ian Rose (talk) 23:07, 17 January 2009 (UTC)[reply]
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