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Frederick Scherger

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Nominator(s): Ian Rose (talk)
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This article traces the career of an officer who, if perhaps not quite as vital to the history of the Royal Australian Air Force as Air Marshal Sir Richard Williams, arguably outshone him in terms of the impact he had on Australia's military and society in general, and was certainly at the top for achievements in rank and office being the RAAF's first (de facto) Chief of the Defence Force and its first Air Chief Marshal. Cheers, Ian Rose (talk) 01:26, 16 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Comments This is a very well written article. Just a few quick edits to be made.

  • There are quite a few contractions that I noticed that should be expanded per MOS.
  • Summary style should be used where there are a series of subpages.
  • Not totally necessary, but the references section should be formatted with {{refbegin}} and {{refend}} tags for visual appeal.

Otherwise, I give my support. The prose is well written, references are correctly formatted including ISBN numbers, and all the sections contain concise accurate information. Cheers, ṜedMarkViolinistDrop me a line 19:35, 16 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Tks for review/support, mate. I agree about reducing the size of the references due to the number of items and have done as you suggested. Re. contractions and summary style, could I trouble you for an example or two of each as I admit nothing leaps out at me there (but I may too close given the length of time I spent on it)... Cheers, Ian Rose (talk) 20:41, 16 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Support Comments This article has "Featured article" written all over it. I hope to see it at FAC.

  • I'm curious about why you chose the Air Commodore photo instead of the nicer CAS one below for the infobox.
    • "Chose"? "Agonised" more like! Yeah, I spent a lot of time determining the best way to spread the relatively few PD or GNU-free portraits I had through the article and, though I totally agree the CAS one is logical for the infobox, it meant I had nothing to use in the CAS/COSC section of the main body - and the Air Commodore one is a good 'un, even if not representative of his most 'known' period. Our friends at AWM took away a great one of him handing over as COSC to Wilton, which used to be 'copyright clear' but is now 'AWM copyright' and, despite a couple of attempts in writing on my part, they've refused to release it under GNU (which the RAAF was happy to do for the CAS pic - go figure). The pic of him as ACM in Legacy I think needs to be there as it's clearly one taken in retirement, not while he was serving. Of course I'm open to suggestions about rearranging the pics to get a decent spread... Cheers, Ian Rose (talk) 22:17, 16 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]
  • "Prior to graduation, he had been selected for an Air Force secondment, which was later made permanent." Are you saying that he did not volunteer to join the RAAF? (It was lucky though; he would never have made lieutenant colonel in the Army by 1939.)
  • Any idea what he was awarded the Air Force Cross for? It was his only award for gallantry.
  • The article has plenty of pictures, but if you want one of him on Aitape, there's one at "File:Wurtsmith and Sverdrup at Aitape.jpg"
    • The 10OG/1TAF section could fit another, so I'll check it, tks. Cheers, Ian Rose (talk) 22:17, 16 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]
      • Haven't included but might still add it since it's the year before the current 10OG/1TAF shot I have, partly depends on results of copyright status check re. another possible CAS pic, which would allow a rejig of the existing images and perhaps even get the current CAS one back in the infobox. Cheers, Ian Rose (talk) 04:07, 18 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]
  • "programme" (British spelling) should be "program" (Australian spelling)
  • "Three squadrons from No. 9 Operational Group were assigned to the Wing as replacements" any idea which ones? The text could be confusing as you say that the Vengeances were withdrawn as inferior, leaving the reader to infer that the replacements were a different type of aircraft.
  • "10OG itself was moved from Nadzab to Cape Gloucester to permit USAAF units with more modern equipment to occupy vital airfields on the Allied front line." That's not true. The need was for longer ranged aircraft, like the P-38 Lightning, which the RAAF did not operate. Whereas the short airstrips at Cape G. were well-suited to the Kittyhawks.
  • "Scherger became not only the first RAAF officer to attain four-star rank, but also the first Duntroon graduate... his position was further strengthened by the promotion as he now out-ranked the three service heads." He was also the first Chairman COSC to hold four-star rank. Wells was only a three-star. You should make this explicit.
  • "Quickly dissuaded during visits to Britain and the US that weapons existed which could be delivered by the RAAF's Sabre fighters or even its Canberra bombers," That's not true. I've taken the liberty of adding a little text at this point.
    • I think the part about being dissuaded that such weapons existed, etc, is accurate based on Stephens but admittedly I was simplifying for the sake of brevity as the article grew (I could have said more on the F-111/TSR-2 thing as well but wanted to get the damn expansion out there as it's been so long coming). In any case, I like your addition and the further sourcing/perspective from Reynolds is useful. Cheers, Ian Rose (talk) 22:17, 16 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]
  • You might consider splitting the sections about CAS and COSC

Hawkeye7 (talk) 21:20, 16 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]

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