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Gisco (died 239 BC)

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Nominator(s): Gog the Mild (talk)

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A leftover from my work on the First Punic and Truceless Wars. Gisco had a background role in several events towards the end of the former and the early part of the latter, before coming to an unfortunate end. There is not, I feel, enough source material specific to Gisco to warrant an FAC, but enough, I hope to pass the ACR bar. See what you think. This is the first time I have attempted to take a bio past GA, so it probably needs close attention. Warning, Gisco's end is pretty grisly. Gog the Mild (talk) 19:13, 18 February 2022 (UTC)[reply]

HF - support

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I'm surprised this one doesn't have any takers - will review soon. Hog Farm Talk 20:56, 20 March 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Yeah. Peacemaker67 ran through it at GAN and didn't find a lot to pick at. And thanks - it was feeling unloved. Gog the Mild (talk) 21:29, 20 March 2022 (UTC)[reply]
  • "He was commander of the major base of Lilybaeum (modern Marsala) on Sicily when the Carthaginians conceded defeat in the war in 241 BC. The army commander retired to Carthage in a rage, leaving Gisco" - I think this can be made a bit smoother - it's not clear at first that Gisco's base was only a subunit of Carthaginian forces on the island
Rewritten. See what you think.
  • As Hannibal doesn't factor into this story at all, is note 1 necessary?
Removed.
It should. That's a newish article. Good find.
  • Does note 3 need attribution for the "probably" statement?
  • "Hamilcar's cavalry and elephants" - link to war elephants here
Oops. Done.
Changed. I never pay any attention whatsoever to categories.

Looks good here, anticipate supporting. Hog Farm Talk 01:24, 21 March 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks Hog Farm, appreciated. All of your comments now responded to. Gog the Mild (talk) 18:00, 21 March 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Supporting. I don't think the note 3 point is a major issue. Hog Farm Talk 18:24, 21 March 2022 (UTC)[reply]
@Hog Farm: I skipped that because it is attributed. But forgot to note this against your comment. Sorry. Gog the Mild (talk) 18:38, 21 March 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Comments Support by Constantine

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Will review over the following days. Constantine ✍ 20:41, 5 April 2022 (UTC)[reply]

  • Made some tweaks and copyedits, as it was quicker than listing them here. Feel free to discuss/revert.
  • Overall it reads well and is the usual fine work, well referenced, clear, and comprehensive. My comments below are more nitpicks and fine-tunings, rather than anything of substance.
  • in the longest continuous conflict and greatest naval war of antiquity because these are extraordinary claims, I suggest adding a reference directly after.
Done.
  • When Hamilcar Barca took command of the Carthaginians on Sicily in 247 BC he was only given a small army and the Carthaginian fleet was gradually withdrawn. this is obviously because of the exhaustion of Carthage's resources, which is explained right after, but I would link it to that somehow. E.g. by adding, before After more than 20 years of war something like, The limited forces made available to Hamilcar are a sign of the exhaustion after 20 years of war" or similar. alternatively i would suggest inserting the info about Barca's limited forces right after ...both states were financially exhausted and suffering from a large drop in male citizens of fighting age. What do you think?
Fair point. I have moved the offending sentence to after the section on exhaustion. Does that make the inference clearer?
Looks good.
  • The map mentions 'Syracusan possessions', but Syracuse is nowhere mentioned. I would suggest at least linking to the city, and possibly adding a brief mention somewhere in the article about their role.
Bleh. Syracuse originally fought alongside Carthage, then defected. It was essentially a logistics base for the 20 years before Gisco arrived on Sicily. If pushed hard I would rather remove the map than try to work in this pretty much irrelevant information.
Makes sense. Linking 'Syracusan' would suffice.
Ah. Done.
  • Publication location for Eckstein
It should have been listed as an encyclopedia, which doesn't need one. Which is just as well, as there is no information I can find for the publisher location relevant to this work. See [1].
Worldcat gives location as Chichester.
So it does. Not sure how I missed that - it has cropped up in FACs, so I have looked hard! Added.
  • Can we add the url for the 'Translation available online from the University of Chicago.'?
Sorry. I thought I had. Done.

That's it. A nice and well-written article. Will support after the points above are addressed.Constantine ✍ 15:36, 9 April 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for that Constantine. Your points all addressed. Gog the Mild (talk) 17:47, 9 April 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Just a few minor issues remaining, so I support at this time. Constantine ✍ 18:42, 9 April 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Thank you. Sorted. Gog the Mild (talk) 18:50, 9 April 2022 (UTC)[reply]
PS Constantine, if you fancy signing off on the sourcing it would be appreciated. Gog the Mild (talk) 19:05, 9 April 2022 (UTC)[reply]
I can certainly sign off on the sources being RS of high quality, especially as I myself own or have read a couple of them. Will have to wait a couple of days for a source spotcheck. Constantine ✍ 19:12, 9 April 2022 (UTC)[reply]
By all means carry out a spot check, but this is not a requirement at ACR and I am not intending to take the article to FAC. Gog the Mild (talk) 20:31, 9 April 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Support Comments from Iazyges

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  • as are his activities prior to his coming to prominence towards the end of the First Punic War. suggest changing coming to rise, coming seems to make the sentenced slightly awkward to me here.
Done.
Life
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  • Prior to his coming to prominence towards the end of the First Punic War same comment here.
Done.
Hi Iazyges and welcome back. Thanks for looking through this. Both points addressed.
Good to be back! Great little article, support for A-class. Iazyges Consermonor Opus meum 17:32, 15 April 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Source review - pass

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