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Article promoted Hawkeye7 (talk) 12:11, 27 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Henry Petre

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Nominator(s): Ian Rose (talk)


A companion piece to the article on Eric Harrison also up for review at the moment; again I've only recently compiled enough information to get it to what I consider ACR standard. Hope I'm not overloading the system but, like the time I dropped three Chiefs of the Air Staff on ACR more-or-less simultaneously, these do have the advantage for reviewers of related content and sourcing.

Petre, along with Harrison, founded the original Central Plying School at Point Cook, Victoria, in 1913–14. Unlike Harrison, he a) saw extensive service in World War I and was highly decorated for his actions, and b) didn't join the RAAF, resigning from the military after the war and returning to his first profession, the law. He never lost his enthusiasm for flying, however, which he continued to do privately at least up until the 1950s. Thanks in advance for your input...! Cheers, Ian Rose (talk) 12:57, 5 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Comments:

Enjoyed it. Minor points below:

  • " borrowed £250" - worth giving a contemporary equivalent sum for this?
  • "Considered "quiet and academic by nature"" - by who? (I'm assuming his peers, but the paragraph doesn't make it clear)
  • ""Two competent mechanists and aviators" - MOS would allow you to lower case the "two" if you wanted
  • " "birthplace of Australian military aviation"" - who's the quote from?
  • "was photographed sitting in the cockpit of the same Deperdussin—now an exhibit at RAAF Museum—" - unclear if "now" is 1961, or 2012. Hchc2009 (talk) 16:59, 8 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  • Support:
    • no dabs, alt text is present, ext links work;
    • images look appropriately licenced;
    • well referenced and coverage seems sufficient;
    • I've read over this a couple of times and nothing in the prose really stood out as needing a tweak;
    • in the Notes, "Coulthard-Clark, The Third Brother, xv". I wonder if this should be: "Coulthard-Clark, The Third Brother, p. xv". Regards, AustralianRupert (talk) 00:42, 12 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]
      • Heh, I thought about that last one and I think I've generally seen Roman numeral page refs (i.e. from the introduction or preface) without the "p." so was following suit -- I don't have a strong feeling on it though. Tks as usual for reviewing, mate! Cheers, Ian Rose (talk) 04:40, 12 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]
        • No worries, I'm not sure either; it just looks inconsistent. However, the argument against it is that the letters/Roman numerals looks a little hard on the eye alongside the abbreviated "p.". It's all good, as they say, though. Cheers, AustralianRupert (talk) 04:51, 12 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]
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