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L 20e α-class battleship

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Another ancient article I assumed would be stuck at GA level (in fact, the one article I figured would be the stumbling block to turning this into a completely FA Featured Topic), but with the acquisition of some new sources, I've been able to develop it into something fairly decent. This covers the German post-Jutland battleship designs, which ultimately came to nothing as a result of their defeat in World War I. Thanks to those who take the time to review the article. Parsecboy (talk) 17:32, 9 March 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Support: G'day, Nate, looks pretty good to me. I have the following suggestions/comments: AustralianRupert (talk) 05:15, 29 March 2018 (UTC)[reply]

  • "World War I" is overlinked in the lead
    • Fixed
  • in the lead, but the by that time: typo
    • Good catch
  • there are no dabs or disambig links
  • 20th century, German embarked: typo
    • Fixed
  • the Ersatz Yorcks and heavier armor: missing possessive apostrophe in "Yorcks"
  • the images lack alt text, and although this isn't a requirement, you might consider adding it as it can be useful for some users
    • Added to both
  • in the infobox it mentions that the belt armor reduced to 130 mm (5.1 in), but I couldn't find these figures in the body
    • Probably a typo - good catch
  • in the infobox it provides a range of 150 mm to 350 mm for the conning tower; however, the body indicates a range of 250 to 400 mm?
    • Corrected
  • in the References, are there any page numbers for the chapter or article by Campbell in Preston's work?
  • in the References, is there an ISSN or OCLC for the Mulligan work in The Journal of Military History? Also, are there any page numbers for this article?

Support Comments: Some comments/suggestions below. Cheers, Zawed (talk) 08:19, 21 April 2018 (UTC)[reply]

  • Lead: I don't think it necessary to have the date of the Battle of Jutland or perhaps if you need some context rephrase to "fought later that year"
    • Good idea
  • Background section: suggest replacing "be superior to either British class" with "be superior to these," since it is clear that the comparison is to the British ships
    • Sounds good
  • Background section: "then also being developed", this phrasing doesn't sound quite right, suggest "then under development"
    • Works for me
  • Development and cancellation: missing word here, "By 11 September 1918, the selected the" Perhaps RMA?
    • Looks like Keith already fixed this.
  • Development and cancellation: note a, the first part doesn't explicitly refer to belt armour, but side armour. I assume the tapered bit is supposed to correspond to the "lower section". Also, the successive use of "below the waterline. Finally, the last sentence should that be 20e?
    • Corrected, and yes, 20e is right.
  • Dupe link: belt armor (the second usage is on "armored belt")

Support Comments by Sturmvogel_66

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Image review the image licensing looks fine for the photo, and the NFUR looks good for the infobox diagram. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 05:50, 26 May 2018 (UTC)[reply]

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