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Moltke class battlecruiser

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Nominator(s): Parsecboy (talk)
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I recently rewrote this article, and it just passed GA. So I'm nominating it for A-class. I appreciate any and all comments towards improving the article. Thanks! Parsecboy (talk) 13:26, 26 March 2009 (UTC)[reply]

  • Support This meets all the criteria. My suggestions for further development are:
    • The Ottoman navy should be linked in the introduction (and should 'navy' have a capital n?)
    • The first para in the development section should make it clearer that only a single ship was initially planned
    • The statement that Goben "defended against a similar incursion of British pre-dreadnoughts" doesn't seem correct, as she played no role in stopping their attempt to force the Dardanelles, and this was defeated by Turkish forts and minefields. Several French pre-dreadnoughts were also involved.
    • My copy of the 1974 edition of Bennett's Naval Battle of the First World War (as reprinted by Penguin in 2001) states that the very modern HMS Queen Elizabeth was sent to the eastern Med in early 1915 to take on Goben and took part in the attempt to force the Dardanelles (pp. 28-30). Given that he died in 1983 I don't see how he could have revised his views and greatly changed the order in which material was presented in his book - is citation 17 correct? Nick-D (talk) 00:35, 29 March 2009 (UTC)[reply]
Thanks for your review. I fixed the first two points you mentioned. As to the third, I know I read somewhere (but can't recall at the moment) a line about how the British and French dreadnoughts not being able to force the Dardanelles because of the "powerful German battlecruiser lurking just on the other side" (or something equally colorful :) ). I'll have to see if I can find where that was. I did include the French (I thought I had already done that, but apparently only in the lead section). As to your last point, I was citing the line at the bottom of the page which reads "...by sinking the pre-dreadnoughts Majestic and Triumph in the next month (p. 45), Lieutenant-Commander Hersing impelled Fisher to withdraw the recently completed 15-inch gunned dreadnought Queen Elizabeth, first of her class, from de Robeck's bombarding force, lest she suffered a similar fate." He of course does mention QE much earlier in the book, but he did not mention her withdrawal (or at least I must've missed it when I was writing this article). Thanks again. Parsecboy (talk) 01:53, 29 March 2009 (UTC)[reply]
The two dabs have been fixed. Thanks for checking those. Parsecboy (talk) 21:43, 29 March 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Comments (little stuff) Support now that all issues are addressed.

"Bottled up"? There's nothing wrong with it, but if there's a better way to put it ...?
  • "The ships had a standard crew of 43 officers and 1010 men, and while Moltke served as the I Scouting Squadron flagship, she was manned by an additional 13 officers and 62 men."
Sounds a bit awkward all in a single sentence.
  • "The guns fired both Armor-piercing and semi-AP shells, which both weighed 302 kg (670 lb)."
does "Armor-piercing" need to be capitalized? -not sure-

The rest is pretty good ^_^. Made some small tweaks. Icy // ♫ 23:21, 29 March 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for your comments. I reworded that sentence in the intro; is it better now? I split the crew sentence and made "armor-piercing" lowercase. Thanks for your copyedits too :) Parsecboy (talk) 00:16, 30 March 2009 (UTC)[reply]
Yes, it's quite all right now for ACR. Changing vote to Support. Icy // ♫ 20:43, 30 March 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Support. Exellent work. Cla68 (talk) 08:17, 30 March 2009 (UTC)[reply]

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