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Article promoted by Peacemaker67 (talk) via MilHistBot (talk) 00:06, 21 January 2015 (UTC)[reply]

SMS Cormoran (1892)

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Nominator(s): Parsecboy (talk)

SMS Cormoran (1892) (edit | talk | history | links | watch | logs)

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Another German warship up for your delectation, this one was one of a handful of unprotected cruisers built for policing Germany's overseas colonies in the 1890s. Cormoran ended her career by being scuttled in Tsingtao at the outbreak of World War I, with her guns going to arm another Cormoran. Thanks for all who take the time to review the article. Parsecboy (talk) 17:22, 16 December 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Support: not much for me to comment on really. Great work as always:

  • there are no dab links (no action required)
  • there are a couple of duplicate links: armored cruiser, Hong Kong, SMS Condor, gunboat, SMS Iltis
    • Should be taken care of now.
  • the images seemed appropriately licenced, although there may be a requirement to add a US licence to the SLQ items prior to FAC
    • Added to the two that were missing them, thanks for catching this.
  • the information in the infobox appears to match the body of the article (no action required)
  • the article seems fully referenced (no action required)
  • the citation style seems consistent (no action required)
  • there were no major grammatical errors that I could find, although it may benefit from a quick copy edit before FAC. Regards, AustralianRupert (talk) 22:18, 2 January 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Support with minor query

  • Greta work as ever.
  • "The gun armament was rounded out by five revolver cannon." - I've normally seen these referred to as "revolving" cannon, rather than "revolver cannon", but that may be a land environment thing! Hchc2009 (talk) 19:06, 4 January 2015 (UTC)[reply]
  • Comments - a few minor points:Support
    • The Citation Check tool reveals the following errors with reference consolidation:
      • Gardiner, p. 253 (Multiple references contain the same content)
      • G253 (Multiple references are using the same name)
        • Fixed both of the above
    • Not sure about the date on File:StateLibQld_1_55044_Cormoran_(ship).jpg - it states "by 1917" however the ship was obviously sunk in 1914.
      • Yeah, it's a wee unlikely that the photo was taken after 1914 ;)
    • "...where she paid an official visit to the sultan...", should sultan be capitalised here?
      • My sense is that titles are only capitalized when they're used in conjunction with a person's name (so, for instance, "President Obama" but "the American president"). But I could well be wrong.
    • "...under the command of Rear Admiral Hoffmann..." - do we know Hoffmann's full name? If so it should be added per WP:SURNAME
    • Suggest wikilinking Sydney at first use.
      • Done.
    • Are there some words missing here: "...During this period, she and the protected cruiser7,000 ihp (5,200 kW) Hansa..."
      • Huh, I have no idea how the hp figure got pasted there.
    • Wikilink Toma (see Toma, Papua New Guinea)
      • Done.
    • Otherwise looks fine to me. Anotherclown (talk) 09:43, 13 January 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Support on prose per standard disclaimer. These are my edits. - Dank (push to talk) 03:29, 16 January 2015 (UTC)[reply]

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