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Second Battle of Newtonia

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After passing GAN in October, this article has since been expanded with two additional sources, and I now believe it's ACR-able. Another Price's Raid action, towards the end of the campaign. While this action was essentially just a series of attacks and counterattacks that fizzled out into a Union victory, it shares a couple characters with the First Battle of Newtonia, which went through ACR earlier this year - James G. Blunt and Jo Shelby. Hog Farm Bacon 04:06, 20 December 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Support Comments: G'day, thanks for your efforts on this article. I have the following suggestions: AustralianRupert (talk) 05:42, 31 December 2020 (UTC)[reply]

  • are there any iconic paintings of the battle that might be able to be used in the infobox? Currently, all we have are maps -- which is fine if that's all we can access within copyright restrictions -- but a painting or iconic photo would help improve the visual appeal of the article
    • Nothing free use of this battle, but there's one of Price's Raid in general I'll add.
  • should the first battle of Newtonia be mentioned in the Background?
    • Done, but only a brief mention, as the two fights don't have much relation to each other beyond Blunt, Shelby, and Newtonia
  • but was forced to fight three battles–Marais des Cygnes: spaced endash or unspaced emdash
    • I've actually rewritten this specific bit out of existence as part of the trimming suggested by Buidhe below
  • the Price and the MSG were --> remove "the" in front of Price
    • Done
  • An element of Fagan's division --> has Fagan been introduced at this point in the article?
    • Thought I had, apparently I didn't. Glossed and linked
  • two brigades, who --> "two brigades, which"?
    • Done
  • position with four guns: do we know what calibre these were?
    • Sinisi refers to McLain's Parrott rifles, but isn't any more specific. Added the Parrott rifles, will check Wood to see if he gives specific caliber tomorrow.
  • The two guns of Collins' Missouri Battery: same as the above?
  • parts of which routed --> "parts of which were routed" or "parts of which withdrew"?
    • Done
  • began making preparation to withdraw --> " began making preparations to withdraw" or "prepared to withdraw"?
    • Done
  • By now, it was approaching sundown, and Union reinforcements commanded by Brigadier General John B. Sanborn arrived on the field, having forced marched from Fort Scott, Kansas: how were these requested, do we know?
    • Added. Via Curtis earlier in the day
  • Two cannons of Battery H, 2nd Missouri Light Artillery Regiment: do we know what calibre these were?
    • Sinisi calls them Rodman guns. Added that, will check Wood tomorrow to see if he is more specific.
  • One modern historian places: suggest naming this person in text
    • Done
  • began completely falling apart --> "began falling completely apart"?
    • Done
  • Most of areas where fighting occurred --> "Most of the areas where fighting occurred"
    • Added
  • in the Sources, I suggest adding a page range for Castel's chapter in Kennedy's work

Source review

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Sources look OK. (t · c) buidhe 23:37, 3 January 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Other comments
  • The "Background" material looks disproportionate; it makes up almost 1/3 of the total non-lead content. Is there anything here that is not absolutely essential for the reader to know? (t · c) buidhe 05:58, 4 January 2021 (UTC)[reply]

CommentsSupport by CPA-5

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Will do this later. Cheers. CPA-5 (talk) 20:37, 22 February 2021 (UTC)[reply]

  • Price had lost over two thirds of his army --> "Price had lost over two-thirds of his army"
    • Added hyphen
  • I see two "howevers" in the "Background" section maybe move one to another section?
    • Reworded to remove one outright
  • voted to reject secession, essentially giving the state two governments --> "voted to reject secession, essentially giving the state two disputed governments"?
    • Went with "competing", as the Union government was not disputed much due to Union control of the state
  • controlled the Mississippi River, preventing a large scale crossing --> "controlled the Mississippi River, preventing a large-scale crossing"
    • Added hyphen
  • I see this "Nichols's Missouri Cavalry Regiment" and "Collins' Battery" maybe standardise them unless they both are proper nouns.
    • Standardized with Collins's
  • American Battlefield Trust estimated 400 and 250, respectively Switch numbers here.
    • Done, in both spots
  • total Union casualties at 26 and those for the Confederates at 24 Same as above.
    • Done, in both spots
  • During the night, most of Shelby's The night of 28/29 October right?
    • Clarified
  • pursuit ended on November 8 at the Arkansas This is the only date who doesn't have a comma all the rest do have one?
    • Added
  • had cost Price more than two thirds of the men --> "had cost Price more than two-thirds of the men"
    • Added hyphen
  • on an elevation behind his main line --> "on an elevation behind his mainline"
    • "mainline" wouldn't work here in American English
  • The "References" section uses DD/MM/YYYY while the "Sources" section uses MM/DD/YYYY maybe standardise the "References" section.
    • Done

That's anything from me. Cheers. CPA-5 (talk) 12:23, 7 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Comments from Eddie891

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  • Huh, guess I reviewed this at GAN. Will endeavor to have a read through this week. Eddie891 Talk Work 23:10, 12 April 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • Cavalry feels like an overlinked term, may not be though
  • " essentially giving the state two competing governments" is there a reason not to drop "essentially"?
    • Removed
  • "to ferret out the Union defenders." could a more encyclopedic word than "ferret" be used? Not sure how commonly understood the phrase is...
    • Replaced
  • " All in all" perhaps "in total"?
    • Done
  • Any idea what time the battle ended at?
    • Looked at Castel, Collins, Sinisi, and a source that I got off of Amazon recently that I will add before a FAC, and none give an exact time, although I've added a couple comparative times from Sinisi. I don't have Wood with me, but I can get ahold of a copy at some point and check to see if he has a specific time
  • Any reason how you ordered the casualty estimates? I'd put the contemporary report or the battlefield trust first followed by the two historians.
    • Re-ordered
  • "The American Battlefield Trust has been part of the preservation" not really sure what this means
    • Rephrased, is this better?

highly readable, seems well done to my eyes. Eddie891 Talk Work 01:10, 20 April 2021 (UTC)[reply]

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