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World War II and American animation

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Nominator(s): Adamdaley (talk)


I am nominating this article for A-Class review because... This article is reasonably close to being an "A-class" article with the amount of information, images, references etc. I would like to see it "A-class". Because I've never promoted an article to "A-class" before. Adamdaley (talk) 05:20, 9 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]

  • Comments: Interesting article, Adam. I can't comment on content as I don't have any knowledge in this area, but I will try to help out in other areas:
  • Comments:
  • An interesting article (I've always been a fan of those Donald Duck films!), but I've some slight concerns over the references in places:
  • "War bonds perhaps received the most advertising and press. Animated cartoons allowed the government to spread their message in a much more entertaining manner." - what's the source for these assessments? The reference seems to be "^ Warner Bros. and U.S. Treasury Dept., Robert Clampett, "Bugs Bunny Bond Rally", 1943, Film", which doesn't look like it would be a likely source.
  • "The government also used animation studios like Walt Disney to encourage people to pay their taxes promptly." - this feels a bit close to OR, in that its source is then a sequence of original films, which are analysed to support the statement.
  • "The Disney team was also commissioned by the government’s agricultural division to make a short film about food in America. The film highlighted the importance of the American farmer. It was meant to alleviate fears by giving detailed numbers on the amount of food produced by America alone so that Americans could rest assured knowing how much food was available to them." - what was the reference for this?
  • "Animation was co-opted in the 1940s for training purposes." - this would need a reference as written, as it implies that animation wasn't used in the 1930s for training purposes, and implies a particular way of commissioning films.
  • "The most elaborate training film, Disney's Stop That Tank!,..." again, no reference beyond the film itself. In whose view is this the most elaborate film, etc.
  • " Those in the Army and Marine Corps were familiar with the names Private Snafu and Lance Corporal Schmuckatelli." - again, a source would be needed for this.
  • "Some films were more potent with propagandistic symbolism than others.... This message of appeasement and signing a truce would have been all too familiar to the adults in the theaters who were probably with their children..." Again, unreferenced - the only reference in this paragraph is to the original film.
  • If you're after some references for these and others, worth trying Rekha Sharma's article "Drawn-out Battles", which does an overview of the literature on the uses of animation in the period (p. 75 in here. Hchc2009 (talk) 08:01, 17 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  • Comments:
  • this is not a formal requirement, but I think it is advisable to go for WP:GAN before A-class.
  • "Propaganda Technique in World War I" needs a page number
  • wait, are all the references here but one film references?? It raises a major WP:OR flag to me. I understand we occasionally use film references and such for fiction plots, but such an article should be referenced primarily with books and academic articles, not primary source films.
  • MoS failure with regards o WP:LEAD. Lead shoudl summarize the article and should contain no unique information. It seems to me that the lead here fails on both counts.
  • While I personally recommend increased citation density, up to every single sentence, I know this is not a required standard. Nonetheless, this article fails even the "one reference per paragraph" requirement, as I count at least two paragraphs (one very long) missing any reference.
  • Please ping me on my talk page if you'd like me to take another look and respond promptly to any issues raised here. I may not notice changes here very quickly otherwise. --Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus| talk to me 19:42, 17 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]
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