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Ecuadorian–Peruvian territorial dispute of 1857-1860

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Hi, this is the first military history article I've put a lot of work into, and I'd like to know what further improvements can be made. Thanks! AniRaptor2001 (talk) 05:53, 8 March 2010 (UTC)[reply]

EyeSerene

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Congratulations on producing such an interesting and well-researched article. Just a few observations to do with as you will...

  • Curly quotes should be used sparingly and only in certain circumstances, according to WP:MOSQUOTE. It might be better to use blockquotes or {{quote}} (or even simple quote marks as they're fairly short quotations).
  • There's a ref tag in "1857 and 1858: beginnings of conflict" that needs fixing
  • I sometimes got lost with the who's who while reading, particularly in the lead. For example, "By late 1859, power was divided between General Guillermo Franco, in the city of Guayaquil, and a provisional government in Quito headed by Gabriel García Moreno" - is this Peru or Ecuador? I wonder if more descriptive sub-section titles might be helpful in assisting a reader to keep track?
  • The lead mentions the Battle of Guayaquil twice - the first is slightly confusing because it seems to imply this was part of the dispute, which is then contradicted. Personally I'd probably remove "however, Franco's government was later defeated by forces commanded by García Moreno and General Juan José Flores at the Battle of Guayaquil in September 1860." altogether.
  • It might be helpful to include a brief explanation/translation of terms like "Real Cédula", "Caudillo" etc the first time they're used - I don't think it's good to encourage a reader too strongly to jump out of an article.
  • Is there more information for the final sentence of the article ("The long dispute thus produced no favorable result for Peru, and the ongoing territorial dispute between the two countries remained unresolved.") How long did it remain unresolved? Can it be cited?

I hope your find these comments helpful, and thank you for submitting your article to Milhist's peer review. All the best, EyeSerenetalk 12:38, 10 March 2010 (UTC)[reply]

YellowMonkey

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