Wikipedia:WikiProject Military history/Peer review/FN Five-seven

I have been working toward Featured Article status, so any feedback is appreciated. ROG5728 (talk) 01:46, 15 August 2010 (UTC)[reply]

This is a good article but I have a couple of issues with it.

In a few instances the article is written from a gun enthusiasts perspective rather than an informed reader. Take "Despite the considerable length of the pistol's 5.7x28mm cartridge, the distance from the trigger to the backstrap measures 69.85 mm (2.75 in), exactly the same as an M9 pistol.[13]" for example. What relevance is this to a layman. Why should I be interested in the M9 Pistol or indeed how should I know what an average distance is?
"with a follower that has the same appearance as that of an M16 rifle's magazine," same thing here, why the comparison? Is the M16 rifle relevant to a pistol?
There seems to be a slight inconsistency with how you deal with units in the ammunition section. Some are 30mm some 30-mm some 30 mm. It needs a bit of consistency per WP:MOSNUM, something some FAC regulars pick up on.
So, only a couple of issues really. The prose could do with some work as to me it was a bit full of technical specifications that broke up the text, but that may be unavoidable I guess. Woody (talk) 11:55, 25 August 2010 (UTC)[reply]