Wikipedia:WikiProject Military history/Peer review/Johnston de Peyster

So I started this one as a stub to support the main John Watts de Peyster article and I found a lot of interesting stuff on the son. Unlike his father, there are very few sources to draw from, and they mainly discuss the flag raising incident over Richmond. I can't foresee getting much more information on his life--he was in the war at 18, then with Sickles in spain, then in the Assembly for two terms, and then dead at a young age. If I can get a copy of the Legislative Record of NY I may be able to flush it out a bit more. My main query for this article is layout, style, and language based--any suggestions or improvements would be welcome. Right not the article reads as one long paragraph. MrPrada 22:43, 2 August 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Kirill Lokshin

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Quite good, overall; a few layout suggestions:

  • A leading left image coupled with an infobox produces an utterly unreadable layout on smaller-resolution monitors; the image should really be staggered down below the lead.
    • Moved it down into the first section–is that far enough?
  • The article can be easily broken down into several sections, albeit short ones: early career, Richmond, later life; this will also help with the layout some.
  • The letter and the image next to it create similar layout problems, and should be similarly pulled apart; or, alternately, the letter can be pulled out of the box so that it can wrap around the image.

Kirill 01:47, 5 August 2007 (UTC)[reply]