Wikipedia:WikiProject Military history/Peer review/Louis H. Carpenter

Louis H. Carpenter

Completing review request for Jrcrin001. Kirill ^[talk] [pf] 02:25, 25 July 2009 (UTC)[reply]

AustralianRupert

Good work so far. I haven't read the whole article yet, but I have a couple of comments at the moment:

There are no disambig links and the external links are good according to the WP:Featured article tools (well done);
There seems to be a cite error with Citation # 18; Done
Further reading section should be formatted with {{cite book}} template; Done
Hyphens and dashes need to be consistent with WP:DASH, e.g add endashes to date and page ranges, use unspaced emdashes in text; Done
The use of the two different images for the Medal of Honor (in the infobox and then in the Honors and awards section) might be a bit confusing for some, I'd suggest using the image of the version he received in the infobox, or just the subject's portrait;

Done I removed the one that was previously displayed in the infobox because its was the wrong era. --Kumioko (talk) 14:00, 28 July 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Duplicate references/citations should be consolidated per WP:NAMEDREFS. I think I saw at least one (Carpenters encyclopedia of Carpenters); Done
In the citations section, where you have the bare url links, I'd suggest embedding them so that the bare link doesn't show, but can still be clicked on, e.g. London Gazette (I don't think this is a requirement, but I feel it makes the citations look a bit 'cleaner', after all the long url takes the eyes off the important information); Done

Anyway, hope this helps. I will try to take a more comprehensive look later. Cheers. — AustralianRupert (talk) 05:34, 25 July 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Ejosse1

Starting with the Infobox:

I would leave out the image source on the caption, as that can be found by clicking through to the image file.

Done --Kumioko (talk) 01:40, 29 July 2009 (UTC)[reply]

You don't need to specify the county on place of birth or place of burial, especially not for Philadelphia.

Done I removed it. --Kumioko (talk) 04:11, 28 July 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Rather than Department of War on Service/branch, use United States Army. I'm not big on also including Union Army, as it seems redundant, but that seems to be the practice.

Done I removed it. --Kumioko (talk) 04:11, 28 July 2009 (UTC)[reply]

For years of service, just put the range of years.

Done I removed it. --Kumioko (talk) 04:11, 28 July 2009 (UTC)[reply]

According to the docs for the Military Person Infobox, do not use Units if you are using Commands.

Done Jut for the record I don't agree with removing the units if commands are used because the 2 are not mutually exclusive but I did it anyway. --Kumioko (talk) 13:59, 28 July 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Under Battles/wars, rather than giving the number of campaigns in each war, specify one or two of the principal battles he participated in. It doesn't need to be a complete resume, either.

Done --Kumioko (talk) 13:59, 28 July 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Leave off the date range under other work.

Done I removed it. --Kumioko (talk) 04:11, 28 July 2009 (UTC)[reply]

It looks like you're trying to cram too much information into the infobox. Just list the important highlights and leave the details for the article.

Other points:

Under Early Life, I would trim down the paragraph about the brother, or use it create a short stub article and link to it. Done
I just don't think the images of regimental and cavalry insignia add anything to the article. The same could be said for the whole Military promotions section and the Samuel Carpenter images toward the end.

Done --Kumioko (talk) 01:40, 29 July 2009 (UTC)[reply]

I'll probably add more later. Overall, this is a worthy article on a subject needing more coverage in Wikipedia. Keep it up! --Ejosse1 (talk) 18:21, 26 July 2009 (UTC)[reply]

In Addition to the items listed above I expanded the lead, moved some images around and reworded a few things. --Kumioko (talk) 01:40, 29 July 2009 (UTC)[reply]