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The following is an archived discussion of an A-Class nomination. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the article's talk page or in the main page's talk page. No further edits should be made to this page.

The article was approved by TRLIJC19 16:25, 1 November 2012 (UTC) [1].[reply]

Deadalive

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Nominator(s): Gen. Quon (Talk) 01:13, 20 September 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Leave comments here for an A-Class assessment! Thanks.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 01:13, 20 September 2012 (UTC)[reply]

  • Comments
  • "The episode later won a 2001 Emmy Award for Outstanding Makeup for a Series." -> I know that "2001" pipes to the Emmy show for that year; but it still looks awkward. How about "The episode later won the Emmy Award for Outstanding Makeup for a Series at the 53rd Emmy Awards"? This applies both for the lead and the "Reception" header.
  • "In this episode, former abductee Bill Miles' (Zachary Ansley) deceased body is found in the ocean, but is miraculously resurrected. Shortly thereafter, the body of agent Mulder is buried. However, after Miles' body is resurrected, Assistant Director Walter Skinner (Mitch Pileggi) orders Mulder's body to be exhumed. When his body is uncovered, weak vital signs are discovered. Meanwhile, Alex Krycek (Nicholas Lea) threatens Skinner and tells him that he must kill Scully's unborn child. Eventually, Mulder is returned to life and is reunited with Scully." -> this is a bit lengthy for the lead, I think. It's just the right size for an episode table in a season article (though I think TBrandley's FLC entailed doing those all, still don't really understand the transclusion thing going on there) but a little long for a lead. Maybe removing either the whole Billy Miles thing would work?
  • "In addition, the main plot has, thematically, been compared to the resurrection of Jesus." -> "In addition, the episode's plot has been seen as a metaphor for the resurrection of Jesus"; the current version seems a bit too comma-heavy
  • "Several months after FBI special agent Fox Mulder (David Duchovny) was abducted by aliens, Dana Scully (Gillian Anderson), John Doggett (Robert Patrick) and Walter Skinner (Mitch Pileggi) discover several returned alien abductees." -> remove "alien" the second time round, it's clear who the "abductees" were taken by.
  • In the "Background" heading, I'd definitely list Roy Thinnes as playing Jeremiah Smith. He's not present here but the section doesn't imply that he is, it's clear it's referring to past episodes (for example, Phoebe Augustine isn't in Episode 2 but her character is relevant to the story so she's mentioned in the "Background".
  • "Three months after Scully, Doggett, Skinner, and Kersh" -> Who's Kersh? I mean I know who "Deputy Director Alvin Kersh (James Pickens, Jr.)" is but the casual reader won't.
  • I'm not keen on the commas before a quote ("then Mulder asks, "Did anybody miss me?""); it implies an aside when the quote is actually a direct continuation of what's going on.
  • Link Sheila Larken
  • You use "utilize" a fair bit; try switching one or two to just "use" for a little variety.
  • "FBI Building" -> don't pipe this one; just link J. Edgar Hoover Building, perhaps with an aside that it is the FBI headquarters.
  • "a mix of various "red goo", that included, among other things, strawberry jam, was placed on Ansley's skin." -> " a mix of "red goo" that included strawberry jam, among other things, was placed on Ansley's skin"
  • " in entries like "Audrey Pauley"" -> "in entries such as "Audrey Pauley""
  • Don't mix % signs with "percent"; stick with one or the other. I'd say spell it out, probably.
  • Given that the Shearman and Pearson book uses European spellings, you might want to paraphrase the "humour" quote so as not to mix spellings. It's not a big issue but it might be less confusing for readers if you phrased it as "noted that the episode's humor and simplicity were "the icing on the cake"."
  • "Tom Kessenich, in his book Examination: An Unauthorized Look at Seasons 6–9 of the X-Files criticized the episode for being "wooden and convoluted" and "set the stage for […] the countdown toward the end of Fox Mulder's time on The X-Files"" -> you'd need something before that second quote, perhaps "and felt that it "set the stage..."".
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