Wikipedia:WikiProject Video games/Peer review/Demon's Souls

Demon's Souls

A second request for the Demon's Souls article since it didn't receive much in the way of feedback for development or a possible improved grade. The article is currently C-class yet at its stage appears to be better in quality. The first review has been archived. Stabby Joe (talk) 18:22, 23 August 2010 (UTC)[reply]

The article has a dab link. GamerPro64 (talk) 19:28, 23 August 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Care to elaborate since I'm getting no additional information from the link. Stabby Joe (talk) 00:27, 24 August 2010 (UTC)[reply]

It seems that User:Mika1h already had that taken care of. evidence. GamerPro64 (talk) 00:32, 24 August 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Basically is there any major issue holding the article back? Granted it's not perfect but by this stage has to be higher than a C grade. Stabby Joe (talk) 01:13, 27 August 2010 (UTC)[reply]

I've assessed the article a B-Class. However in the spirit of actually reviewing it, here are the issues that stand in the way of it passing a Good Article nomination:

The gameplay screenshots are far too large. There is no need to go any higher than 500px wide Fixed
The soundtrack image is too large. It doesn't need to be bigger than 300 x 300px (see File:Achtung_Baby.png as a good example of a music cover). Truthfully the image is not necessary and in fact unbalances the article. Three non-free images are plenty Fixed
The box art should use Template:Vgboxart fur for its rationale Fixed
The Merchandise and other media/Soundtrack section needs tweaking so that it does not offset the Reviews template in the Reception section. Fixed
The Wiki external link should be removed per WP:ELNO, which states that an external Wiki should be substantial (think the Star Wars wiki) to be added. I found no evidence of it being substantial. Also the forums external link should be removed. The US official site is sufficient, and we don't link to forums. Fixed
Shunsuke Kida should be delinked unless you feel there is sufficient notability for this person, in which case the article should be made, or the link removed. Fixed
The first paragraph of Merchandise and other media is unsourced Fixed
The second half of the second paragraph in the Gameplay section is unsourced Fixed
Per WP:LEADCITE if information is found elsewhere in the article, it should not be cited in the lead. Given what is cited, it should probably be mentioned in the body of the article, and the reference moved there. Fixed

That's about it given a quick once-over. I didn't look deeply into the prose, but hopefully that helps. --Teancum (talk) 11:44, 27 August 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Appreciated. I'll get on these soon enough. Stabby Joe (talk) 22:45, 27 August 2010 (UTC)[reply]

The article and said problems have now been tweaked. Stabby Joe (talk) 16:03, 3 September 2010 (UTC)[reply]

COUGH Any other major or minor issues holding back a good grade? Stabby Joe (talk) 17:54, 14 September 2010 (UTC)[reply]

The images could use a better caption than a "this is what's in the picture" caption. See The Beatles: Rock Band for a good example, and WP:CAPTION to read up a bit more. --Teancum (talk) 02:38, 24 September 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Out of the two screenshots, the first was more of a temporary that stuck. What I would like more is a screenshot highlighting the online aspect. The second however, in the story currently highlights two of the main "characters", so I'm not sure how that could/would be changed at this momement. Stabby Joe (talk) 23:08, 25 September 2010 (UTC)[reply]