Wikipedia:WikiProject Video games/Peer review/Kingdom of Loathing

Good game that I'd like to see get to at least GA status, was working on it a while back but things stalled. Most people who edit seem to be fans so there's cruft that needs to go and a lot of the article needs rewriting for better flow but I'm at a loss as to how to actually do it. Help would be nice. --Danie Tei (talk) 13:58, 24 March 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Comments

Inline citations generally aren't required in the lead.
Probably don't need a distributor field in the lead infobox, especially because it's the same as the publisher.
Traditionally in video game articles, the Gameplay section comes first, followed by Plot, Development, Reception, and Legacy (if applicable).
You're right about the cruft. Those lists probably aren't necessary, and could be better expressed as prose.
The History section could be combined with Business model to become Development. Community could go into Gameplay. Radio...probably isn't notable enough to be included.
The reviews infobox is kind of small. Are there any more scores that can be added? If not, might be best to remove it.
A lot of the sources seem to be primary or otherwise unreliable.

That's just a quick look. Prose and sources could use some work, but I've definitely seen articles in worse shape. Let me know if you want any copyediting. — Levi van Tine (tc) 09:42, 26 March 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Gonna work on this.  :) Lychosis T/C 20:31, 4 May 2009 (UTC)[reply]