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Lara Croft and the Guardian of Light

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I would like to know what needs to be done to get ready for GA nomination. Thanks. —Mike Allen 04:41, 15 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Teancum's Comments

As a contributor, I saw a few things:

  • The cover art should be replaced with a PNG image that's 256px wide
  • The word "engine" in the infobox is redundant, it's the engine heading, so it's obvious
  • Platforms in the infobox should be listed in order of release, then alphabetically
I don't understand this comment, is there an example I can follow? —Mike Allen 07:16, 16 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]
  • What this basically means is this: Currently the Platform(s) parameter lists the titles as such: PlayStation Network, Xbox Live Arcade, Microsoft Windows -- but the 360 was released first, then Microsoft Windows and PS3 on the same day, followed by iOS (which isn't listed). Also, the platform should be listed, then the distribution service if necessary. So it should be: Xbox 360 (XBLA), Microsoft Windows (Steam), PlayStation 3 (PSN), iOS. Also under the release dates it should be listed as Microsoft Windows, and not "PC". Ensure that instances of PC throughout the article are replaced with Microsoft Windows, or just Windows. Mac users will argue that it too is a PC, and so we try to avoid that argument altogether. --Teancum (talk) 13:10, 20 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]
  • In the infobox single player should come before cooperative
  • "Co-op" might be a term a non-gamer can misinterpret, thinking it's a shortened name for something else. Be sure to spell out cooperative.
  • Story - should be named "Synopsis", and the current "Synopsis" should be renamed "Plot". I've only seen Synopsis used when the plot and the characters aren't separate sections.
  • Release - "Guardian of Light was shown at E3 2010 on 14 June." Is that 2009 or 2010? Always post the year
  • Release - there is a date in the American format. Since all other dates are EU format, it should follow suit
  • Reception - "83.29 percent" should be "83.29%"
  • Reception - "based on XX reviews" can be removed. As its an average it wouldn't matter unless there are very little reviews.
  • Reception - There's no need for three short sentences to list Metacritic/GameRankings scores for each platform. You can probably lump at least two platforms together in one sentence, making that lead paragraph flow easier.
  • Lead - The first two paragraphs should be combined
  • Lead - The paragraph on release info should probably have the DLC at the end, considering you're not pointing out dates. Any other DLC might do well to be mentioned there.
  • Plot - Can more plot information be added? This merely is the plot up to the point that the player(s) take control for the first time

That's all for now. --Teancum (talk) 12:42, 15 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]

I haven't played the game yet, so I can't really tweak the plot. —Mike Allen 05:17, 21 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]
About the cover art. The image page tells me the source for the image is from Square Enix (which really tells me a lot...), so I'll have to look for it online. Also, why does it need to be PNG format? —Mike Allen 01:39, 16 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]
All done except for my above comment. :) —Mike Allen 07:15, 16 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]

More comments added, responses given --Teancum (talk) 13:10, 20 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]

More comments from Teancum

  • The Reception section jumps back and forth between past and present tense. For example: "Meagan VanBurkleo of Game Informer gave the game a 9 out of 10, closing her review"
  • There's no commentary on the iOS versions in the Reception section. Here's two quick sites to take a look at[1], [2]

--Teancum (talk) 15:39, 29 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]


Hulk16's Comments

These are just some minor suggestions

  • The sentence "Lara retains her dual pistols" needs to be changed, how does the reader know she used pistols before?
  • The sentence "Intial sales of the game have done well" does not make much sense, perhaps "Intial sales show the game has done well"
  • I don't know where to put it, but the last sentence in the first paragraph of the gameplay section is in the wrong place, it has nothing to do with that section.
  • In the multiplayer section the "player(s)" can be changed to "players" because it is multiplayer.
  • Add a comma after "competitiveness into a game"
  • there is no references in the synopsis section
  • Add a comma before and after "Forest Large"
  • Add a comma after "Anniversary" in the second paragraph of development.

Other than that this is a really good article. --Hulk16 01:15, 16 December 2010 (UTC)

Thanks for your suggestions. About the synopsis needing a citation.. isn't the game itself the source? I don't see why it needs a source. I know film articles don't require sources for the plot summaries, I figured it would be the same for games also. —Mike Allen 01:31, 16 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]
All done except for my above comment. :) —Mike Allen 07:15, 16 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]
It's not 100% required, but PNG images are preferred, and since a 256px image would be the highest resolution by default for the page, it's recommended to do it. And since a 256px image would be great, it just makes sense to go with the preferred PNG. I can see if I can find an image to replace the original. --Teancum (talk) 19:49, 17 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]
The reason I asked is that I have a hard time reserving the quality of a PNG when I save it to a smaller size (KB). Also could you explain how the release dates should be listed in the infobox? —Mike Allen 04:45, 18 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]
Oh I forgot: about the sentence in the gameplay section (The game does not have any loading screens once a level is initialized.) -- isn't loading times part of gameplay? —Mike Allen 21:01, 16 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]
I'm sorry I made a mistake. Yes you are correct, I don't think you need a source for the synopsis. And yes, I consider loading part of the gameplay. Again, my mistake, you are right. --Hulk16 00:26, 17 December 2010 (UTC)
No problem. —Mike Allen 04:45, 18 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]
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