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Arthur Sullivan (13 May 1842 – 22 November 1900) was an English composer best known for his operatic collaborations with the dramatist W. S. Gilbert. Among his early works were a ballet, a symphony, a cello concerto and a one-act comic opera, Cox and Box, which is still widely performed. He wrote his first opera with Gilbert, Thespis, in 1871. In 1875 the impresario Richard D'Oyly Carte engaged Gilbert and Sullivan to create a one-act piece, Trial by Jury. Its box-office success led the partners to collaborate on twelve more full-length comic operas, including H.M.S. Pinafore, The Pirates of Penzance and The Mikado. Sullivan's only grand opera, Ivanhoe, though initially successful in 1891, has rarely been revived. His works include 24 operas, 11 major orchestral works, ten choral works and oratorios, two ballets, incidental music to several plays, and numerous church pieces, songs, and piano and chamber pieces. His hymns and songs include "Onward, Christian Soldiers" and "The Lost Chord". (Full article...)

Ssilvers and Tim riley, we're finishing up the blurbs for articles promoted at FAC in the fourth quarter of 2017. Thoughts and edits are welcome. - Dank (push to talk) 23:17, 18 December 2019 (UTC)Reply

This looks spot-on to me, except that I'd definitely drop the repetition of Gilbert's initials at second mention of him. Tim riley talk 23:23, 18 December 2019 (UTC)Reply
Oops! Done. John was pretty pleased with this one, I'll convey your imprimatur. - Dank (push to talk) 23:56, 18 December 2019 (UTC)Reply
Sorry I'm late (I've been away), but I think this downplays Sullivan's non-G&S work. I would change the second sentence to say: "Among his early works were a ballet, a symphony, a cello concerto and a one-act comic opera, Cox and Box, which is still widely performed." If you then need to save space, the third sentence could drop "Four years later", since we state that date. -- Ssilvers (talk) 16:32, 19 December 2019 (UTC)Reply
Done. - Dank (push to talk) 16:58, 19 December 2019 (UTC)Reply
Thanks! -- Ssilvers (talk) 17:05, 19 December 2019 (UTC)Reply