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SMS Hessen was the third of five pre-dreadnought battleships of the Braunschweig class. Commissioned into the Imperial German Navy in September 1905, the battleship was armed with four 28 cm (11 in) guns. In the first two years of World War I, the ship served as a guard ship at the mouth of the Elbe, patrolled the Danish straits, and supported attacks on the British coast, including the raid on Scarborough, Hartlepool and Whitby in December 1914 and the Bombardment of Yarmouth and Lowestoft in April 1916. The following month, the ship was present at the Battle of Jutland, the largest naval battle of the war. In the last daytime action between capital ships on 31 May, Hessen and the other pre-dreadnoughts of II Battle Squadron covered the retreat of the battered German battlecruisers away from the British battlecruiser squadron. In World War II, the ship served as a radio-controlled target ship and an icebreaker. (This article is part of a featured topic: Battleships of Germany.)

Pinging Parsecboy; as I mentioned, we're doing blurbs for articles promoted at FAC in June, July and August 2018. Thoughts and edits are welcome. - Dank (push to talk) 00:44, 3 December 2019 (UTC)Reply

That looks good to me - it jumps a bit in chronology, but that's a limitation of the space constraint, and I think it's probably more important to emphasize the wartime service. Thanks Dan. Parsecboy (talk) 17:48, 3 December 2019 (UTC)Reply
Thanks Nate ... it's fine to move things around if you like. - Dank (push to talk) 18:18, 3 December 2019 (UTC)Reply