Wikipedia talk:Today's featured article/September 1, 2006

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This paragraph could really use some help in the prose department. The flow is virtually non-existent and makes me wonder if it is indeed worthy of being on the front page. I say this not to criticize the authors, but I feel it should be majorly re-worked. if nothing else. If I have time, I'll get to it. -Mysekurity 20:55, 25 August 2006 (UTC)