Draft talk:Terson's syndrome

Dr. Weiner

• You have a really good start on the information! Once you get your formatting sorted out, you'll have a good basis to work from!
• Do not try to submit your work as the page! This is the rough draft stage. You have made things more complicated for yourself! You should just be editing on your sandbox.
• This does not match the formatting guides or the rubric.
• Please come see me to get help with wikipedia's editor. You are not using the headers or other tools that you need to use!
• The original abstract was much better. Keep it and add as needed. Don't replace things without a good reason! I see that you tucked it at the bottom. Leave it as the abstract, where it belongs!
• Every piece of information needs a citation. If you took all the info in a paragraph from one place you can just cite at the end of the paragraph, but nothing longer than a paragraph should be uncited.
• Link HEAVILY to other wikipedia pages. The first time you use a term, it should be linked.
• Use simple terminology whenever possible. This is not written in a lay accessible manner.
• Sources need to be cited using wikipedia's citaton manager.
• Links to sources outside wikipedia should be formatted through wikipedia's links and given descriptive text, not just left as links.
• When you summarize recent research, actually summarize what has been found if the work is completed! Don't just talk about it vaguely.
• Don't use case studies in recent research when there are good recent medical studies! Case studies are a last resort if there is nothing better! There is a LOT of recent research I found quickly. You have one article and some case studies! If you need help finding research, come talk to me.

Sweiner02 (talk) 05:34, 12 November 2024 (UTC)

Cierra Garrett

• This article contains lots of good information, good job on finding everything!
• For the headings like "signs and symptoms" and "challenges in diagnoses" try switching the style of the text to 'heading'. Doing this should add sections in between categories
• Don't forget to add in-text citations. To do this, at the end of your sentence where you used information from another source, click the "cite" button at the top of the page
• Add pictures

CierraGarrett (talk) 01:14, 13 November 2024 (UTC)

Maria Rizwan

• A lot of great detail is added into the page and I like that
• I know others have said this but adding heavily cited Wikipedia pages to everything will help it give that wiki page look.
• Also make sure the links are clickable. I was not able to click on the links that were added and go to that page.
• Maybe if you can find some pics that could help it would look less like a lot of words and something else for the eyes to see. Mariarizwan100 (talk) 17:13, 13 November 2024 (UTC)