Talk:110 East 42nd Street

Latest comment: 4 years ago by Epicgenius in topic GA Review

GA Review

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This review is transcluded from Talk:110 East 42nd Street/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.

Reviewer: Hog Farm (talk · contribs) 15:18, 4 April 2020 (UTC)Reply


I'll try to get this reviewed in the next couple days.

Criteria

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1. Prose  Pass

2. Verifiability  Pass

3. Depth of Coverage  Pass

4. Neutral  Pass

5. Stable  Pass

6. Illustrations  Pass

7. Miscellaneous  Pass

Comments

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  • "Among these were the New York Central Building at 47th Street and Park Avenue, as well as the Grand Central Palace across 42nd Street from the present Bowery Savings Bank Building." - This isn't wrong, per se, but since you're using among these (implies plural), and then list one item, and then create a different clause. I feel like this would read better as " ... and Park Avenue and the Grand Central ... ". My grasp of grammar isn't great though, so if you dislike this, keep as is.
  • "offered $2.9 million for the hotel (equal to $28 million in 2018[a])" - Just to double check that this is the intended meaning, the hotel was still standing at that point?
  • "In January 1921, Mandel gave the Bowery Savings Bank" - Implication is that the land was a gift, is this accurate?
  • "The presence of the new Bowery Savings Bank branch and the presence of brokerage firms" - Repetitive phrasing here, can the sentence be rewrote without using "the presence of" twice in the sentence?
    • Fixed.
  • Wikilink granite at first usage.
    • Done.
  • You use both names of the building throughout the article, this should probably be consistent.
  • Wikilink sandstone
    • Done.
  • I think you linked to the wrong water table. The sentence doesn't make much sense with the geologic term you linked to.
  • New York City Subway is a duplink
    • Removed.
  • Wikilink limestone
    • Done.
  • Wikilink ashlar
    • Done.

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  • Spot check of refs clean, all working and supporting claims.

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  • Would it be better to use the template to convert " 50 inches (1,300 mm)" into centimeters instead of millimeters?
    • Yes, done.
  • "197.5 feet long" - Use the template to convert to meters.
    • Done.

Placing on hold, just a few things to clean up. Hog Farm (talk) 23:24, 6 April 2020 (UTC)Reply