Talk:1919 Atlantic hurricane season/GA1
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Reviewer: Hurricanehink (talk · contribs) 19:57, 6 October 2014 (UTC)
- Ref for the season being among the least active?
- Fixed--12george1 (talk) 16:42, 13 October 2014 (UTC)
- Err, why isn't there a summary on the two June or August TD's and one September TD? And why doesn't the infobox indicate they exist?
- "also did not effect land" - when it's a verb like this, it's "affect", for the last time :P
- Fixed--12george1 (talk) 16:42, 13 October 2014 (UTC)
- "Historical weather maps indicates" - grammar
- Fixed--12george1 (talk) 16:42, 13 October 2014 (UTC)
- "at all times" - according to whom/what?
- According to the person who wrote that report? :P --12george1 (talk) 16:42, 13 October 2014 (UTC)
- "while located near Marie-Galante, Guadeloupe" - the island is very small, and that location is kinda random. Thus, I don't think you need to specify where on "Guadeloupe", and the next sentence is kinda useless
- Fixed--12george1 (talk) 16:42, 13 October 2014 (UTC)
- H2's MH sections should probably be just one paragraph
- Fixed--12george1 (talk) 16:42, 13 October 2014 (UTC)
- "An hours later" - eh?
- Fixed--12george1 (talk) 16:42, 13 October 2014 (UTC)
- "Two schooners capsized in the Windward Islands." - it's kinda obvious, but you should add "due to the hurricane"
- Fixed--12george1 (talk) 16:42, 13 October 2014 (UTC)
- "Strong winds lashed the Bahamas, destroyed buildings on Eleuthera and demolishing houses on San Salvador Island." - weird structure/grammar
- Better?--12george1 (talk) 16:42, 13 October 2014 (UTC)
- "At least 27 people drowned aboard a ship." - where?
- Fixed--12george1 (talk) 16:42, 13 October 2014 (UTC)
- How can there be "considerable damage" near Miami while also "nothing very serious resulted"?
- Hmm, the report actually says something like that, "Considerable local damage was done in Miami and vicinity, although nothing very serious resulted." I'm not sure how I should fix this.--12george1 (talk) 16:42, 13 October 2014 (UTC)
- "Three people drowned in the area. Damage reached approximately $2 million." - merge
- Better?--12george1 (talk) 16:42, 13 October 2014 (UTC)
- "The depression moved northeastward and detached from the stationary front." - if it was attached to the front, how was it a tropical cyclone? TC's are non-frontal by definition
- What was the basis for the peak intensity of H2 or 3? Was it a ship reading? Land pressure/wind report? Ditto for the rest of the storms, really.
- Why does TS 5's infobox say it formed on the 12th, when the prose said it became tropical on the 11th?
- Fixed--12george1 (talk) 16:42, 13 October 2014 (UTC)
- " Later on November 12, it curved northwestward." - why? And why did it move to the southwest?
It's a decent article, but doesn't quite feel done. Lemme know when you address these comments, and I'll reassess. ♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 19:57, 6 October 2014 (UTC)
- Hurricanehink, it's been over five weeks since the article was last edited by the nominator. If it isn't ready—and there was a significant edit on October 14—then maybe it's time to start thinking about closing this as unsuccessful. BlueMoonset (talk) 04:56, 21 November 2014 (UTC)