Talk:1977 Dry Blackthorn Cup/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Sammi Brie (talk · contribs) 04:04, 22 November 2022 (UTC)

The review in summary: Read User:Sammi Brie/Commas in sentences. This is almost a GA. Hold to BennyOnTheLoose—ping me when done. Sammi Brie (she/her • t • c) 04:12, 22 November 2022 (UTC)

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Lead

• The event attracted around 1,500 spectators, and was televised, with a forty-minute programme on ITV being broadcast on Christmas Eve, 24 December 1977. Fagan won the tournament, by defeating Higgins by 4 frames to 2 in the final. The first comma in each of these sentences should be removed: User:Sammi Brie/Commas in sentences. The former sentence is duplicated in "Background" with the same issue.

• Amended. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 09:22, 22 November 2022 (UTC)

Summary

• Fagan won the first frame, but lost the second Same

• Amended. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 09:27, 22 November 2022 (UTC)

• Fagan escaped from the snooker successful by hitting a red ball by hitting the cue ball Is this intended?

• I reworked this part. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 09:27, 22 November 2022 (UTC)

• after failing to pot the yellow ball when only the colours were left, and leaving it in a position close to the pocket I think this comma can go
• Fagan equalised with a 58 break in the second frame, and took the lead Remove comma
• Fagan exhibited high-quality safety play, and won the frame Remove comma
• The reporter for Snooker Scene magazine wrote that [quote], and praised Remove comma. I might also de-capitalize "winning" in the quote.

• Amended per the four points above. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 09:27, 22 November 2022 (UTC)

Spot checks

Normally, I would do a spot check, but the nature of the sources and their location makes such impossible. Many are offline or digital archive sources to which I do not have access. However, the sources make sense in context.

Many thanks, Sammi Brie. Let me know if anything else is required. Regards, BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 09:31, 22 November 2022 (UTC)

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