Talk:1st Swiss Regiment (France)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Jaguar (talk · contribs) 15:02, 2 October 2021 (UTC)

I'll give this a go. ♦ jaguar 15:02, 2 October 2021 (UTC)

• The lead is on the short side and doesn't summarise the article adequately per WP:LEAD. An expansion is needed before this part meets the GA criteria
• "However, it wasn't until March 1805" - was not
• "The men of these remaining small units were merged to form the new 1st Swiss Regiment," - per MOS:BOLD, use of bold should be confined to the lead
• "and because the British mistook the 1st Swiss as the British De Watteville's Regiment (because of the almost identical uniform)" - the bracketed statement could be merged in this sentence
• "Among the officers, one was killed, 1 mortally wounded, and 4 wounded" - write small numbers in prose
• "to guard the (left) northern flank" - remove these brackets
• "Life was far from perfect, however" - informal language
• "led the Swiss into disaster and the annals of history" - too poetic for Wikipedia I'm afraid :-(
• "toward the enemy yelling En avant le 2e!" - this should be in quotes
• All three paragraphs in the Uniform section between with "1st Swiss" - needs mixing up

That's all I have for this one. I'll leave this on hold. ♦ jaguar 20:02, 2 October 2021 (UTC)

Changes made, if you have anymore make sure you tag me J-Man11 (talk) 20:44, 2 October 2021 (UTC)

We're good to go. ♦ jaguar 20:58, 2 October 2021 (UTC)