Talk:2003 Casablanca bombings/GA1

GA Review

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Nominator: NAADAAN (talk · contribs) 22:04, 5 March 2024 (UTC)

Reviewer: Rollinginhisgrave (talk · contribs) 02:19, 4 August 2024 (UTC)

I'll take this on. Rollinginhisgrave (talk) 02:19, 4 August 2024 (UTC)

General comments

I'll be adding things as I go. Rollinginhisgrave (talk) 02:37, 4 August 2024 (UTC)

Closing this up to due to nominator inactivity. Hopefully these issues can be addressed and it can be renominated, thankyou! Rollinginhisgrave (talk) 02:19, 11 August 2024 (UTC)

Prose/content

Lede

• and sites near the Belgian consulate and an old Jewish cemetery The sites were near both the Belgian consulate and an old Jewish cemetery, or there were sites near the consulate and also sites near the cemetery?
• revendicated Simpler word
• claiming the lives of WP:EUPHEMISM
• 33 victims and 12 suicide bombers in the infobox it says 11 attackers were killed.
• on the spot More clear
• The attacks came in a rise in radical preachers ungrammatical
• many of the preachers were veterans of the Soviet-Afghan war non-sequitur
• led to the terrorist cell's ringleader led to the... capture?
• after following a radical preacher Bentassir was following the preacher or they were?
• unclear circumstances -> contested circumstances
• The attacks shined light idiom
• with a government initiative fighting against slums reword for clarity
• after a series of attacks in 2007. clarify who the attacks are on.

Just having gone through the lede, I can see many grammatical issues, and a lack of clarity and colloquial language. Please complete a copyedit of the article before I continue my review of the article, to ensure I am not repeating myself.

Rollinginhisgrave (talk) 02:37, 4 August 2024 (UTC)

The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.