Talk:2009 International Bowl/GA1

Latest comment: 14 years ago by Grondemar in topic GA Review

GA Review

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Reviewer: Wizardman Operation Big Bear 20:01, 25 June 2010 (UTC) I will review this tonight; my apologies for the delay. I may split it between tonight and tomorrow since this is a long article. Wizardman Operation Big Bear 20:01, 25 June 2010 (UTC)Reply

Lead

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Team selection

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  • "The International Bowl contracted with the Big East and Mid-American Conferences to select teams to participate in their annual game." Contracted sounds a bit odd; reword.
  • "The two teams played each other for six consecutive seasons" in six.. sounds better I think.
  • Any of the "# yards" stuff needs a non breaking space, i.e. 27 yards. Why I'm not positive, but that's what it says to do.
  • "The Huskies easily won their first game 35–3 against FCS opponent Hofstra." Link FCS. I know it means Division I-AA, but others may not.
    • I had a note I was planning to add to the Notes section explaining FBS / FCS, but I keep getting Cite.php errors (see the linked revision). If you have any idea how to fix this error please let me know. Grondemar 03:14, 27 June 2010 (UTC)Reply
      • Strike the above, I see that they added an explanation to WP:FOOT of the bug; apparently the #tag workaround only works once with list-defined references. When I moved the note out of the LDRs, it worked fine. Hopefully they will fix that bug eventually. Grondemar 03:31, 27 June 2010 (UTC)Reply
  • Link Temple in the following sentence, as well as other schools whose football programs weren't linked.

Pregame buildup

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  • "The turnaround of the Buffalo program brought kudos to Bulls head coach Turner Gill," kudos seems a bit informal.
  • "The Huskies allowed the 10th-fewest yards per game in the nation with 281 yards allowed" Any specific rankings for run and pass defense?

Game summary

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  • "and punted the ball to Connecticut" link punt, and other terms that non-football fans may not get (i.e. sacked)
  • "and settled for a 38-yard Field goal" field goal doesn't need to be capitalized.
  • "UConn's turnover woes continued on their next possession, when on their second play from scrimmage after receiving Buffalo's kickoff Tyler Lorenzen was sacked," 'next possession when, on their...kickoff, Tyler'
  • "punting the ball back to UConn after three plays. The Huskies drove to within the Buffalo 10-yard line;" where'd the Huskies start from?

Final stats/Aftermath

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  • "with 2,083 rushing yards, best in the nation that year." 'Which led the nation' sounds better.
  • What position was Anthony Sherman?
    • Fullback. I didn't mention it initially in the passing section as his position is listed a couple of sentences before in the running section; I added the position for consistency. Grondemar 04:58, 4 July 2010 (UTC)Reply

Misc.

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  • I'm a bit confused as to the point of the group=" " in your references. It could probably be removed without harm unless there's something I'm not seeing. Wizardman Operation Big Bear 19:26, 30 June 2010 (UTC)Reply
    • Originally I placed the group=" " in the references to segregate them from the endnotes which had group="Note". After removing all the group=" " attributes the page rendered the same, so it turned out as you said that they were not needed. They have been removed. Grondemar 14:16, 2 July 2010 (UTC)Reply