Talk:2009 Sylvania 300/GA1

Latest comment: 9 years ago by Good888 in topic GA Review

GA Review

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Reviewer: Good888 (talk · contribs) 18:35, 4 January 2015 (UTC)Reply

Going to review this NASCAR article tomorrow. good888 (talk) 18:35, 4 January 2015 (UTC)Reply

Review is now complete. good888 (talk) 09:13, 5 January 2015 (UTC)Reply

Lead section

  • "Mark Martin of the Hendrick Motorsports team; Denny Hamlin finished second and Juan Pablo Montoya came in third." I think you meant that Martin won the race.

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  • "with Jeff Gordon, Kurt Busch and Brian Vickers all tied with 5,010 points." I suggest rewriting this as you have used the word tied twice already. Suggest rewriting to: "with Jeff Gordon, Kurt Busch and Brian Vickers all level on 5,010 points."
  • "Dodge, in third place, were tied on points with Ford in the battle for third place." So that means they are joint third? If so, I suggest rewriting to: "Dodge and Ford were tied on points in the battle for third place."
  • "Later that day, Montoya paced the final practice session, with Truex, Jr. and Kurt Busch followed in second and third respectively." Rewrite to: "Later that day, Montoya paced the final practice session, ahead of Truex, Jr. in second and Kurt Busch in third."
  • "Five laps later, Jeff Gordon moved into sixth position, while Edwards passed Labonte for sixth." Makes no sense as Jeff Gordon was sixth at the time.
  • "Three laps later, the third caution was given when Erik Darnell spun sideways" You mean the fourth caution.
  • "Two laps after the restart, the fifth caution was given as a multi-car collision occurred, as Joey Logano and Elliott Sadler collided, collecting Paul Menard, Michael Waltrip, Robby Gordon and John Andretti." Does this crash count as The Big One (NASCAR)? If so, link it under multi-car collision.
    • It does   Done
  • "Five laps later, Montoya passed McMurray for the fourth positions" Change positions to position.
  • "By the 190th lap, Stewart had a lead of three seconds, while Montoya passed Stewart for third." I think you meant that Johnson was leading.

I will promote once the issues above are addressed. good888 (talk) 09:13, 5 January 2015 (UTC)Reply