Talk:3 Words (song)/GA1

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GA Review

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Reviewer: (CK)Lakeshadetalk2me 23:26, 24 July 2010 (UTC)Reply

Issues Part 1(Resolved)
Opening:
  • ""3 Words" is a song by British recording artist Cheryl Cole (of Girls Aloud) and, is both the opening and title song from debut studio album." Rewrite to say: "3 Words" is a song by British recording artist Cheryl Cole (of Girls Aloud). The song is both the opening and title song from her debut studio album, 3 Words (album).   Done
  • The uptempo synth and dance music-inspired pop song was written by Cole, George Pajon and will.i.am; the latter of also features on and, produced the song. It was cited by Cole as her favourite song from the album for being different to what people expected. Where ihave in bold needs to be re-written, it doesnt quite make sense.   Done

Musical composition and style:

  • "3 Words" is a uptempo synthpop,[1] dance music[2] pop song[3] featuring vocals from and produced by will.i.am who also wrote the track alongside Cole and George Pajon. Rewrite to say ..... "3 Words" is an uptempo synthpop,[1] dance music[2] pop song[3]. The song was written by Cole, alongside George Pajon and will.i.am who produced the song and also features in the song. Something like that, couldnt quite figure out a great wording.   Done
  • Noticeably missing is the standard "verse-chorus-verse song structure"[3], and makes use of a sparse but complex chord progression of C♯ m–G♯ m–C♯–A major/C♯ ..... Missing a word somewhere.   Done
  • The production featuring features loops of acoustic guitar[5] with a piano melody[6] to form an "atmospheric love song"[7] in the vocal range of G♯3 to B4.[4]
  • Critics stated that the "sophisticated love song"[8] is difficult to class by genre because it is it's "unconventional", something which<no comma> Cole agreed when she said, "[its] totally different from anything I've done [with Girls Aloud] or liked before". Incorrect commas.   Done
  • The industry noted how it was "unlike many things currently [at that time] on radio or being released".[6] The industry? Everyone single person noted this? lol. Needs rewritten.   Done

Other:

  • Dab links. Please see here for how to correct   Done
Issues Part 2(Resolved)
Critical Reception:
  • "David Balls of Digital Spy writes, [...]" Wrote because its past tense.   Done
  • "Louise McCudden of Inthenews.co.uk, however, argues that although "her voice sounds pleasant" Argued as its past tense.   Done

Music Video:
Background and Concept:

  • "The first The music video was a viral verson version directed by Vincent Haycock in the week begining beginning 19 October 2009". Spelling and other mistakes, removed/replace where ive striked out.   Done
  • "The video was described as being distinctly different to that of previous single "Fight for This Love",[34] drawing comparisons with to Madonna[35] and Lady Gaga.[36] " To not with   Done

Music Video
Synopsis:

  • "The video begins with Cole sat sitting alongside will.i.am, wearing a "Lady Gaga-inspired platinum blonde wig" .... Incorrect tense.
  • In these the early scenes she "swaps her bronzed tan for alabaster skin, smokey eyes and pale lipstick". ... incorrect tense
both issues have been fixed. --Lil-unique1 (talk) 23:57, 29 July 2010 (UTC)Reply

Reception:

  • I would start with a line indicating the videos reception which by scanning seems to be mixed or negative. Ill let you decide which one it is. I would say mixed to negative. (CK)Lakeshadetalk2me
issue resolved. --Lil-unique1 (talk) 23:57, 29 July 2010 (UTC)Reply

Chart Performance:

  • Needs to be rewritten. Needs expansion as it currently is basically listing the charts sections.
re-write complete --Lil-unique1 (talk) 23:58, 26 July 2010 (UTC)Reply
  • "A day before its digital release[14] and two days before its CD release[15] the single climbed to number fourteen[16] although it and then in first week of 2010 it would go on to peak at number four.[17]"..... huh? lol. needs a re-write.
fixed... sorry! --Lil-unique1 (talk) 16:29, 2 August 2010 (UTC)Reply
  • "It was more successful than fellow X Factor judge Dannii Minogue's second single "Success", which reached number eleven in 1991[20] and Cole's protege, Alexandra Burke's second single "Broken Heels" which peaked at number eight.[21]" Not needed, its fluff.
removed, i thought it was a good comparison but on second thoughts it could be seen as fancruft --Lil-unique1 (talk) 16:29, 2 August 2010 (UTC)Reply
References(Resolved)
Refs:
  • Inconsistent referencing dates. Eg:2009-10-23 and 17 July 2010. Please choose one or the other.
  • ref [20] → Error in heading "Smith, Lizzie date=26 Jan. 2010"
  • ref [35] → Needs an accessdate
  • ref [37] → [39] You have an extra period after Apple Inc
  • ref [42] → Needs an accessdate
  • ref [43] → Needs an accessdate
  • ref [44] → Needs formatted and replaced with proper chart archive
  • ref [45] → Needs an accessdate
  • ref [46] → Needs an accessdate
  • ref [48] → Needs an accessdate
  • ref [49] → For some reason everything is in italics with an extra . after apple inc
  • ref [50] → [54] You have an extra period after Apple Inc
all issues fixed. --Lil-unique1 (talk) 23:57, 29 July 2010 (UTC)Reply

Refs:

  • Inconsistent referencing dates. Eg:2009-10-23 and 17 July 2010. Please choose one or the other.
  • ref [13] → Remove italics.
  • ref [14] + [15] → Remove italics.
  • ref [27] → Remove italics.
  • ref [45] → [48] Remove italics.
  • ref [57] → [62] Remove italics.
could not find any instances of inconsistant dates, above italics issues fixed. --Lil-unique1 (talk) 23:57, 29 July 2010 (UTC)Reply
Prose (Complete)
:GA review (see here for criteria)
  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose):   b (MoS):  
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (references):   b (citations to reliable sources):   c (OR):  
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects):   b (focused):  
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:  
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:  
  6. It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales):   b (appropriate use with suitable captions):  
  7. Overall:
    Pass/Fail:  
    - (CK)Lakeshade - talk2me -