Talk:Acronicta rumicis
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editHi! So I have been assigned to add onto this wiki page for my behavioral ecology class. If there are any errors or suggestions to make the page better please comment! Jenniferra (talk) 21:14, 12 October 2017 (UTC)
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editThis article is or was the subject of a Wiki Education Foundation-supported course assignment. Further details are available on the course page. Student editor(s): Jenniferra. Peer reviewers: RV2014.
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editHello! I really enjoyed reading your page on the knot grass moth, especially the part about how evolution during the time of the industrial revolution affected their coloring! I mainly fixed grammatical errors, changed the wording in some places to make the sentence more clear, and did some formatting of the wiki page in the Life History section. There is one sentence in the Oviposition section where it says, “The longest ridges tend to have the most defined zigzag formation on lead” where I didn’t quite understand what “on lead” is referring to. Also, I was wondering in the Taxonomy section if the third group was characterized by any specific structures or ovipositioning? Richywutang2018 (talk) 03:27, 31 October 2017 (UTC)
Peer review
editHi, the article looks great. It is well-written, and the information is organized logically. I made smaller grammar fixes, added hyperlinks, and reworded some sentences. I did notice that there are many lists of items ex. food, plants, countries. You could reformat those into bullets to help with organization.
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edit@Jenniferra: Just some notes and questions for the expert.
- I standardized on British English since there is a strong connection to the UK.
- There was a mix of referring to the species in the singular and the plural so I standardized on singular. Hope I didn't miss any.
- Where it says "zigzag formation on lead", I wasn't sure what that meant.
- Where it says "helps with organization on the host plant", I wasn't sure what that meant.
- Under the section "Pigmentation and structural colouration", there needs to be something about the driver for this. I assume predation by birds, but that should be specified.
- Where it says "sensory or olfactory", olfactory is a sense, and what other sensory cues might there be?
- Where it says "having a sense of direction", it sounds wrong, maybe something like losing the ability to navigate?
Hope that helps. Keep up the good work. SchreiberBike | ⌨ 19:42, 30 October 2017 (UTC)
Peer Review for Class
editYou did a very good job with your article! It was detailed and had a lot of great information! I suggest some grammatical changes and minor changes to sentences to help them flow better. Also, there were a few run-on or confusing sentences, so I suggest rephrasing that. Also, I think that you could split up the Distribution and Habitat sections, and it would be great if you could add a Mating section and a Social Behavior section. Also, there are some vague statements, so I suggest providing some more detail so that the reader has some more context - for example: the sentence about the research in England and Scotland, and the sentence in the Habitat Loss section where you mentioned recent studies. Also, since the Food Resources section only has a subheading for the caterpillar stage, it would be helpful if you also had a subheading for food resources for the adult stage. Also, in the Predators section, it is not good to include statements like “therefore, it makes sense that …” because it seems like you are forming your own conclusion, rather than reporting on facts. Same for Genetics and Color Pattern section where you have “it is reasonable to see that _____” because it sounds like you are making conclusions. RV2014 (talk) 04:16, 1 November 2017 (UTC)
Hi, I think this a great article, and it is clear that you have worked very hard on this. I made some general grammatical fixes and changed the wording in some places. Keep up the good work! Shreenidhipm (talk) 05:44, 1 December 2017 (UTC)