Talk:Adam Exner/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Sammi Brie (talk · contribs) 05:12, 17 March 2024 (UTC)

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
It is reasonably well written. a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists): It is factually accurate and verifiable. a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism): It is broad in its coverage. a (major aspects): b (focused): It follows the neutral point of view policy. Fair representation without bias: It is stable. No edit wars, etc.: It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate. a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall: Pass/Fail:
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One minor question about ref 43 and some copy tweaks. Very well written. Ping me when done. Sammi Brie (she/her • t • c) 06:11, 17 March 2024 (UTC)

Did you know? If you fancy doing so, I always have plenty of GA nominees to review. Just look for the all-uppercase titles in the Television section. Reviews always appreciated. Special note: I notice you are from Vancouver. If you are interested in reviewing it, I have CIVT-DT as a page available to be nominated for GAN.

Copy changes

• He resumed his studies that September, first at St. Joseph's College in Yorkton, before transferring to St. Thomas College in Battleford one year later. Remove the comma after "Yorkton"

• Removed. —Bloom6132 (talk) 07:19, 17 March 2024 (UTC)

• He subsequently taught at the Oblate seminary of St. Charles Scholasticate in Battleford as professor of moral theology from 1960 to 1972, and served as its rector for six of those years. Remove comma (WP:CINS)

• Fixed. —Bloom6132 (talk) 07:19, 17 March 2024 (UTC)

• He remarked that this change was "not easy", but that he Remove the second "that"

• Done. —Bloom6132 (talk) 07:19, 17 March 2024 (UTC)

• His predecessor, Cardinal George Flahiff, perceived Exner to be "well experienced" and a "man of good judgment", and predicted a promising future for the archdiocese with him in charge. Remove comma after "judgment"

• Changed. —Bloom6132 (talk) 07:19, 17 March 2024 (UTC)

• He found that he was sometimes "labelled as too conservative, and sometimes as too liberal", and that his goal was simply to "combat the idea that Catholics can pick and choose which dogma to accept" Remove comma after quote 1

• Done. —Bloom6132 (talk) 07:19, 17 March 2024 (UTC)

• However, Exner's observation that O'Connor had "already suffered enough, to the point where his health has suffered and deteriorated", Remove ending comma

• Removed. I had put this comma in so that the ref would be situated after punctuation instead of a word (not sure if this is considered good practice). —Bloom6132 (talk) 07:19, 17 March 2024 (UTC)

• Exner served as the principal consecrator at the episcopal ordination of David Monroe on March 12, 2002, exactly 28 years to the date of Exner's own consecration as bishop. Might help to explain where Monroe was serving here?

• Monroe was being ordained the new Bishop of Kamloops (having been Vancouver's vicar general immediately before). I'm unsure where I should place that info without breaking up/cluttering the sentence and my thinking is that readers could just click the wikilink to find out more if they wanted. Should I include it in brackets after his name? —Bloom6132 (talk) 07:19, 17 March 2024 (UTC)

On second thought, it'd be a lot, and there is a link there. Sammi Brie (she/her • t • c) 17:33, 17 March 2024 (UTC)

• estimated to be C$38–43 million missing "worth"

• Added. —Bloom6132 (talk) 07:19, 17 March 2024 (UTC)

• Exner is noted as a staunch opponent Is this now worth a "was" as he is deceased?

• You're right. My bad – other than dates, I haven't really updated his article since his passing. —Bloom6132 (talk) 07:19, 17 March 2024 (UTC)

• This was done with the backing and direction from Exner Maybe This was done at Exner's direction and with his backing. ?

• Good idea of putting the subject first. Fixed. —Bloom6132 (talk) 07:19, 17 March 2024 (UTC)

• The BCCT had rejected TWU's application for certification, because the university required its students to sign a community covenant pledging to abstain from all sexual intimacy outside of heterosexual marriage. Remove comma

• Done. Again, I inserted this comma so that the ref would be placed after punctuation instead of a word —Bloom6132 (talk) 07:19, 17 March 2024 (UTC)

Sourcing and spot checks

Please consider clipping your Newspapers.com citations. Having archive links to /newspage/ URLs doesn't work well. I did make all the live links clips; the vast majority were not, and only one multipage article had both parts clipped.

• 4: A source only cited in the infobox, a personal testimony by Exner. It does have the correct consecration date. Not sure what all it is used for, but it seems reasonable here, and secondary sources back up that claim. Y
• 10: Article mentions that Exner still occasionally plays polkas and waltzes. Y
• 25: Mentions the consecration of St. Mary's on September 25, 1887. Co-cited ref 24 notes, Extensive repairs and renovations were made to the cathedral in 1987-88. A combined celebration of its rededication and its centenary (delayed from September 1987) took place in January 1988. Y
• 34: Official synod announcement. Y
• 35: Mentions reasoning for Exner being the only Canadian invitee to synod. Y
• 43: Naming of new archbishop of Vancouver. The source does not specifically say the Pope accepted his resignation; is this normal?

• Yes, this is normal. If a bishop is appointed to another diocese, he doesn't resign from his existing diocese. In fact, the date that his appointment is announced by the Vatican is regarded as the day he begins his tenure as bishop of his new diocese (with installation being more of an administrative formality). —Bloom6132 (talk) 07:19, 17 March 2024 (UTC)

Alright, just making sure. I may have been raised Catholic, but this is a question someone might reasonably ask. Sammi Brie (she/her • t • c) 17:32, 17 March 2024 (UTC)

• 62: News article on 1999 execution of Faulder. Y
• 78: Quote in a news article about the 2019 edition of the Exner award. Correctly reproduced. Y

Earwig flags quotes and work titles; no concerns.

Images

There are three images in the article: Exner's coat of arms and images of St. Mary's Cathedral and Vancouver College. All three are freely licensed. Alt text is provided. Consider: Adding a fair use image of the deceased subject if no freely usable image exists.

@Sammi Brie: thanks very much for the review! I hope I've addressed your comments satisfactorily. —Bloom6132 (talk) 07:19, 17 March 2024 (UTC)

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