Talk:Agneta Matthes

Latest comment: 10 years ago by Editør in topic Further improvement
Good articleAgneta Matthes has been listed as one of the Social sciences and society good articles under the good article criteria. If you can improve it further, please do so. If it no longer meets these criteria, you can reassess it.
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The text of the entry was: Did you know ... that Agneta Matthes and her husband (pictured), who ran factories in Delft producing yeast, perfume, and margarine, developed a workers' housing area in garden city style, Agneta Park?
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Reviewer: TheSpecialUser (talk · contribs) 08:34, 11 August 2012 (UTC)Reply

Looks good! TheSpecialUser TSU 08:34, 11 August 2012 (UTC)Reply
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  • She and her husband Jacob Cornelis van Marken were involved in ->She along with her husband Jacob Cornelis van Marken, were involved in
  • Matthes and van Marken created living quarters for workers in her hometown - replace hometown with the name. Most probably it'll be Amsterdam but right now it is not clear
  • named Agneta Park after her that are considered a model for the cooperative development and construction of garden cities for workers - I cannot understand the meaning properly. "garden cities for workers" what does that mean? Please re-phrase a bit
  • Matthes founded and ran the Delft perfume factory, Maison Neuve, to take advantage of a by-product of the yeast factory. -> Matthes founded and ran a Delft perfume factory, Maison Neuve, to take advantage of a by-product from the yeast factory.
  • in Bibliography - can you provide ISBN or links where it is available?
  • Matthes was taught privately, and spent 1862 to 1864 in Utrecht in a boarding school -> Matthes was taught privately, and lived in Utrecht at a boarding school from 1862 to 1864
  • When she returned to Amsterdam, she studied piano and dance, and took art classes and religious instruction. -> When she returned to Amsterdam, she studied piano and dance, as well as took art classes and religious instruction.
  • he remembered this method and decided to produce industrial baker's yeast of consistently high quality -> he recalled the method which he learnt during his tour, and decided to produce industrial baker's yeast of consistently high quality
  • Please state that why their marriage was childless.
  • In 1886, when Jacques van Marken was in France at a spa, Agneta Matthes found a letter from Mary Eringaard requesting the child support that he owed for their children,[1] which led to Matthes discovering that her husband had begun a relationship with Eringaard in 1871 when she was aged 15, and that he had four children by her.[3] - split into two sentences
  • She did not tell van Markem that she knew about the affair until three years later, in 1889, when at the age of 36, Eringaard and two of her children died from tuberculosis. -> She did not tell van Markem that she knew about the affair till three years, but in 1889, when Eringaard was 36 years old, two of her children suffered death due to tuberculosis. + ref?
  • Officially they were foster children - link "foster children" if possible
  • I never heard of it but now know it's meaning due to GAR. If I were a reader who is not knowledgeable about the term, I would be curious to know the meaning (which the majority of users will be as majority of population on earth consist of people not good at English) TheSpecialUser TSU 10:00, 12 August 2012 (UTC)Reply
  • but it was an open secret in Dutch society that van Marken was their father. - open secret? please clarify
  • The youngest daughter, Anna Erry Eringaard, was married in 1932 to the diplomat and publisher Daniel Johannes von Balluseck (1895–1976). -> change "the" to "a". Also link diplomat and publisher
  • It doesn't matter how much "a" is used. "the" is used for prominent things. On the other hand, "the" can be used for him if it is in the start of a new line but it is odd where it is placed in the current line. TheSpecialUser TSU 10:00, 12 August 2012 (UTC)Reply
  • It was the first such magazine in the world. -> It was the first magazine in the world of that kind.
  • such as his 1881 book -> such as his book of 1881

That is the half part. Activities and services and Social welfare are left out which I'll finish by mid-night. Thanks! TheSpecialUser TSU 02:56, 12 August 2012 (UTC)Reply

Thanks! That's 8 now. :) Thine Antique Pen (public) 15:07, 14 August 2012 (UTC)Reply

Further improvement

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Here are some pointers to improve the article:

  • expand lead to better summarize the article (MOS:INTRO)
  • include the pronunciation of her name (WP:PRON)
  • mention her death in article text
  • fix dead links in three references one reference
  • change the link of reference "KB ontvangt complete editie oudste bedrijfsblad ter wereld" to the actual article

Editør (talk) 11:21, 12 January 2014 (UTC)Reply

I've updated the list. – Editør (talk) 17:18, 30 January 2014 (UTC)Reply