Talk:Albert Smijers/GA1

Latest comment: 1 year ago by LunaEatsTuna in topic GA Review

GA Review

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Reviewer: LunaEatsTuna (talk · contribs) 00:33, 1 August 2023 (UTC)Reply


Looks interesting! I will review this.  LunaEatsTuna (💬)— 00:33, 1 August 2023 (UTC)Reply

I love your username BTW.  LunaEatsTuna (💬)— 04:57, 1 August 2023 (UTC)Reply
Thanks! ^_^ KINGofLETTUCE 👑 🥬 16:03, 1 August 2023 (UTC)Reply
Fun article! I love Dutch history. I have placed this article on hold; over to you.  LunaEatsTuna (💬)— 17:27, 1 August 2023 (UTC)Reply
Okay, looks good to pass! Nice work on the lead.  LunaEatsTuna (💬)— 23:37, 1 August 2023 (UTC)Reply

Copyvio check

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Earwig says good to go.

File(s)

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  • What is the source for circa 1950 for File:Albert Smijers.png? The cited work is from 1958, which was 65 years ago. By my understanding of the license on Commons, this would mean that the photograph is not in the public domain, no?
It's been too long since I've seen this so it was probably my bad. Have taken it down to avoid any doubts. KINGofLETTUCE 👑 🥬 16:03, 1 August 2023 (UTC)Reply

Prose

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  • I would explicitly note in the lead that he published Werken van Josquin des Prez. Also:
  • I would also note that it was first published in 1921.
  • Overall, the lead could be greatly expended IMO; it should summarise some more in-depth aspects of his career, even if the article is short.
  • In § Early life, I would lead with his full name as its his first mention in the body.
  • "born in Raamsdonksveer to" – change to "Raamsdonksveer, Geertruidenberg, North Brabant" as is standard for place names.
  • Likewise, it should be "Klosterneuburg in Lower Austria" as many readers will not know that Klosterneuburg is in another country.
  • Add " (''{{lang-en|Karl Luython as a Composer of Motets}}'') " next to the name of his thesis.
  • Should be "publications, and would eventually" to separate the line about Petrucci.
  • IMO "and it was completed" should be its own sentence as "It was completed".
  • "Jacob Obrecht, and" – unnecessary comma.
  • "The Netherlands" – should be a lowercase the here.
  • "From 1952 till 1955" – until.
  • Should be "Huis ter Heide, Netherlands".

Refs

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Passes spotchecks on refs 4 (cited three times), 6 and 20.

Others

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