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My first article - criticism and advice very welcome

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Hello, I’m an aspiring Wikipedia content creator and complete beginner. This is my first article and I welcome all criticism and advice on how I can improve. I still have some citations to source for this – these are marked by * in the text.

What am I getting wrong about the ISBN’s cited here?

My interests are Contemporary Art, Physics, Philosophy and Literature. 2025Newbie (talk) 18:13, 9 November 2024 (UTC)Reply

This is a really good first article! It's well-researched and generally well-written. My main suggestions:

The "genre" section seems to state some observers' commentary or opinions as facts. My suggestion would be to check out WP:Wikivoice and WP:ATTRIBUTEPOV, although the rest of the article seems to have done a good job.
The article as a whole feels like it uses too many direct quotes, rather than paraphrasing or summmaries.

Regardless, good job, and I hope to see more great work from you in the future. :) – Closed Limelike Curves (talk) 19:03, 11 November 2024 (UTC)Reply

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