Talk:Aoi Koga/GA1

GA Review

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Nominator: Narutolovehinata5 (talk · contribs) 08:50, 3 July 2024 (UTC)

Reviewer: ZKang123 (talk · contribs) 11:18, 3 July 2024 (UTC)

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
It is reasonably well written. a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists): It is factually accurate and verifiable, as shown by a source spot-check. a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism): It is broad in its coverage. a (major aspects): b (focused): It follows the neutral point of view policy. Fair representation without bias: It is stable. No edit wars, etc.: It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate. a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall: Pass/Fail:
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I will begin a review shortly after my return from holiday on 4 July.--ZKang123 (talk) 11:18, 3 July 2024 (UTC)

I'll review the Japanese sources in the meantime. Just driving by.

QF:

• 1,3,4,5 seems to be fine - Only a single revert since the start of the year with it reverting an unsourced addition, No tags, No previous GA nominations...
• 2 - Sentence "This made her want to..." Is a direct copy from anilist, and the website does not seem to permit this.

Main criteria

• For 6 - No images are present, but there weren't any available on commons, so I'm going to ignore that.
• For 2 - I notice how Twitter (Never calling it "x") is used as a source in some areas (ex.19, 26), are you sure there's no other sources that can support this?

Spotchecks -

• • Citation 6 - In the last sentence of the "Early Life" section, I was unable to find the statement of Aoi answering that she lied that she wanted to be a hairdresser or a pet groomer, although in the source it says that she lied to people that Aoi wanted to be a "radio personality" in high school. "Acting career" section has no problems for citation 6.
  • Citation 16 - No issues.
  • Citation 17 - No issues.
  • Citation 34 - No issues.

ABG (Talk/Report any mistakes here)

 23:12, 3 July 2024 (UTC)

Alright, sorry for breaking in, I'll leave the rest for the original reviewer after the spot check is done to not hijack the GAR. ABG (Talk/Report any mistakes here) 04:02, 4 July 2024 (UTC)

Regarding the use of Twitter sources, all of these accounts are the official Twitter accounts of the games in question, so I used them per WP:ABOUTSELF. I tried using alternative sources, including Koga's agency profile or official websites, but at least at the time I couldn't find any. I tried using Twitter only as a last resort. As for the Anilist issue, they copied from us rather than the other way around, so that's not necessarily problematic. Narutolovehinata5 (talk · contributions) 06:36, 4 July 2024 (UTC)

Yeah, sorry I missed that since I forgot that mirror existed because of the absence of the template in the talk page. (this is my first time doing this process as well.) I guess I'll change that if that's a last resort. ABG (Talk/Report any mistakes here) 07:42, 4 July 2024 (UTC)

Regarding Citation 6, it turned out that I had accidentally used the wrong reference from Japanese Wikipedia. I found the actual reference and have added it to the article. The issue is that it's under a paywall and the usual tricks failed, so I have to assume good faith that whoever had access to it used it correctly. Narutolovehinata5 (talk · contributions) 12:03, 4 July 2024 (UTC)

Jawiki tends to have very little references but I guess they had one for this article. Noted. ABG (Talk/Report any mistakes here) 23:11, 4 July 2024 (UTC)

Review

Alright let me review! Thanks to AlphaBetaGamma (talk · contribs) for the source review.

• No images for me to review, haha. It's fine if there aren't any free-use media of her, though.
• After being inspired to pursue a voice acting career at a young age, she started her career in 2014. – She started her voice acting career in 2014 after being inspired to do so at a young age
• Her first exposure to voice acting was – She was first introduced to voice acting...
• This made her want to "become friends with dolls" – This inspired her desire to "become friends with dolls"
• helped her decide – influenced her decision
• , as well as the light music club while in high school. – , and later the light music club in high school
• Growing up, she felt a sense of embarrassment about liking or watching anime among her friends. Along with her shy personality and difficulties expressing herself in public, this led her to initially hide her intention of pursuing voice acting from others. – This chunk doesn't seem encyclopedic in tone. Might suggest: When growing up, she experienced a sense of embarrassment regarding her interest in anime among her peers. Coupled with her shy personality and difficulties expressing herself in public, she initially concealed from others her career aspiration in voice acting.
• Although some would ask her – I think "Even if" would be a better connector.
• After telling her family about her plans of pursuing voice acting, Koga felt discouraged as it would mean a move to Tokyo for work, something she did not see as practical at the time. – After informing her family about her plans to pursue voice acting, Koga felt discouraged as she would require moving to Tokyo for work, which she did not view as practical at the time.
• At her parents' suggestion – Suggest "Upon"
• After finishing her training, at the suggestion of one of her teachers, she enrolled in the training school of the agency 81 Produce, becoming affiliated with them upon her finishing her training. – After completing her training, she enrolled in the training school of 81 Produce, an (acting) agency, on the recommendation of a teacher and became affiliated with the agency/firm upon graduation.

More comments to come.--ZKang123 (talk) 13:03, 7 July 2024 (UTC)

• For the filmography section, I might recommend doing a table instead of just a list, as other anime/manga biography GAs do (e.g. Aya Hirano and Aki Toyosaki). But the list itself is fine given how each has a relevant reference and citation.
• I don't find other issues with the article. While brief, it's still rather broad in coverage about her life and career.

Putting on hold.--ZKang123 (talk) 05:58, 8 July 2024 (UTC)

Thank you for the review. I've done all of the requested grammar/copyediting suggestions. As for the Filmography section, I don't have the technical skills or know-how to turn it into a table so I may have to ask for assistance from another editor for that. Let me know if there is still anything else I need to do. Narutolovehinata5 (talk · contributions) 11:06, 9 July 2024 (UTC)

It's fine, at least at GAN stage. Satisfied with all the changes. Passed.--ZKang123 (talk) 00:10, 10 July 2024 (UTC)

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