Talk:Armenia at the 2018 Winter Olympics/GA1

Latest comment: 6 years ago by Crzycheetah in topic GA Review

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Reviewer: Gonzo fan2007 (talk · contribs) 15:28, 5 September 2018 (UTC)Reply

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Criteria: 1a. prose ( ) 1b. MoS ( ) 2a. ref layout ( ) 2b. cites WP:RS ( ) 2c. no WP:OR ( ) 2d. no WP:CV ( )
3a. broadness ( ) 3b. focus ( ) 4. neutral ( ) 5. stable ( ) 6a. free or tagged images ( ) 6b. pics relevant ( )
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Hi Crzycheetah! I will review this article for you. I will complete a quick c/e of the article first. Feel free to revert any of the changes, as I will only make what I feel are non-controversial improvements. « Gonzo fan2007 (talk) @ 15:28, 5 September 2018 (UTC)Reply

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Prose & MOS
  • In the lead, "The team's best finish in any event was a 42nd place mark by " - would recommend changing "best" to "highest", as finishing 42 out of 200 racers would be better than finishing 40 out of 40.
  • In the first paragraph, "Armenia became an independent nation again following" - maybe explain what you mean by "again"?
  • Alpine skiing paragraph, "skis and was thinking of dropping out of competition." - change "was thinking of" to "was contemplating"
  • Alpine skiing paragraph, "new pair of skis to Pyeongchan just in time" - change "just in time." to "in time for his first event."
  • Alpine skiing paragraph, "On 22 February 2018, Karapetyan, placing 50th in the first race of Men's slalom and 41st in the second race, finished the event ranked 42nd." - kind of a confusing sentence structure. Maybe something like "On 22 February 2018, Karapetyan finished the Men's slalom ranked 42nd after placing 50th in the first race and 41st in the second race." « Gonzo fan2007 (talk) @ 15:46, 5 September 2018 (UTC)Reply
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