Talk:Ashfield, New South Wales/GA1

Latest comment: 8 months ago by Phlsph7 in topic GA Review

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Nominator: LibStar (talk · contribs) 04:37, 25 March 2024 (UTC)Reply

Reviewer: Phlsph7 (talk · contribs) 08:19, 31 March 2024 (UTC)Reply


Hello LibStar and thanks for your improvements of this article. However, despite the improvements, the article fails criterion 2b since there are too many unreferenced paragraphs and and some whole sections lack references. Examples are the section "Commercial area", the subsection "Notable residents", and the paragraphs starting with "Ashfield has three primary schools" and "For federal elections, Ashfield is part of the". According to criterion 2b, these passages require inline citations "no later than the end of the paragraph". I suggest that you add all the relevant references before a renomination.

A few other observations

  • WP:EARWIG did not spot any copyright problems
  • there had even be a public school operating replace "be" with "been".
  • It produced a number of notable students including Pamela Travers (author of Mary Poppins) and tennis champion Daphne Akhurst. There were a number of other private schools reformulate to avoid repeating "a number of"
  • The Wesley Private Hospital in Frederick Street is a well established replace "well established" with "well-established"
  • from Ashfield council's heritage guide should "council" be uppercase?
  • is located at the South Western corner of the property, replace "South Western" with "southwestern"
  • in support of a new 106 acre reserve replace "106 acre" with "106-acre"
    • similar for 50 metre pool and 25 metre pool later
  • who lived nearby between 1918—1924 replace "1918—1924" with "1918 and 1924"
  • had a higher than average number replace "higher than average" with "higher-than-average"
  • since the 2016 merger to the Inner West Council replace "to" with "with"
  • (since the 2016 merger to the Inner West Council, it has been known as 'speaker series') I don't think this should be in italics
  • This included the funding of an artist-in-residence program, who is based replace "who" with "which" or reformulate to to make clear that the second clause is about the artist and not about the program
  • The current artist is the Refugee Art Project and New Moon Collective. I assume it should be "artists are" rather than "artist is"
  • Ashfield also holds a cycling milestone when it hosted this may have to be reformulated to avoid the clash in tense: Ashfield holds ... when it hosted

Phlsph7 (talk) 08:19, 31 March 2024 (UTC)Reply

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